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RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Ascor - 04-29-2010 (04-29-2010, 01:57 AM)Elias Wrote: @Hacker/not so much in writing like me people (i understand this as People who can't write so good)Ehrm... WTF?! Frist bring your story on! And then we'll see! RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Magnamancy - 04-29-2010 Well, in contrast to what Elias mentioned, I've had a couple neat ideas thanks to 1 of the 2 openings, which could be considered happy. I'm writing. I'm really enjoying it too. ^^ will be submitted before the due date. RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Wiro - 04-29-2010 beginning 2 (Click to View) The sun went down beyond the horizon and painted the landscape in blood red. Blood! As if he hadn't seen enough of that the last months. His glance wandered around on the battlefield. Finally it was over. After three month, silence came back into the vale for the first time. But it wasn't a peaceful silence. It was frightening. He shuddered and was about to go back the way he came from, but he had to walk to the other side of the valley. The smell of death normally would have been hardly endurable, but he got used to it over time. This, however, didn't apply for the sight presented to him. Dead soldiers of both sides were lying next to each other, looking at him with empty, vacant eyes, still clutching their weapons in death. He began to shiver even more. Involuntarily his hand raised towards a pocket of his vest and opened it. His fingers fumbled around until he found... -Ouch! he said really pissed off. As he looked around himself he noticed that one of the corpses moved. He stepped closer and scared the little cat, which had been hiding under the dead soldiers cloak. It was getting dark. He started to walk slowly away through the battlefield. As he walked he started to hum a melody, which normally wouldn't fit in this kind of sad situation, but he felt it cheering him up. He stopped next to a body, whose face was hidden under a hood. Gently he picked the sword next to the corpse and continued his march. Suddenly he stumbled over a body and fell to the ground, stabbed by his own sword. Slowly his eyes were closet and he fell next to the body, which he had stumbled over. He knocked on the corpse so it turned around and it was his own brother. Then, out of nowhere a dark body rose up. He glared at the dead hero with hate. At last he said with a voice, which echoed through the battlefield: Fail, noob. RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - The Lost Global Mod - 04-30-2010 hope nobody is disappointed, BUT i am not going to join this one.. i have too much on my mind and every word i type is only because i force myself.. you can say hurt myself.. I am at my end i guess (storywise). So yea, wish you all luck and i hope you can break your limits. RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Taniaetc - 05-01-2010 Owww... teh whiskas-identical-purple-wise-cat isn't joining. Sad and happy for me. (honestly ) Sad because u hurt urself. Happy because there won't be one of the greatest writers joining... so I have higher percentage of winning . RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Magnamancy - 05-01-2010 That sucks to hear Phil, I hope whatever it is heals alright... Well, here's the intro I chose. Introduction 2 (Click to View)
~~ The sun went down beyond the horizon and painted the landscape in blood red. Blood! As if he hadn't seen enough of that the last months. His glance wandered around on the battlefield. Finally it was over. After three month, silence came back into the vale for the first time. But it wasn't a peaceful silence. It was frightening. He shuddered and was about to go back the way he came from, but he had to walk to the other side of the valley. The smell of death normally would have been hardly endurable, but he got used to it over time. This, however, didn't apply for the sight presented to him. Dead soldiers of both sides were lying next to each other, looking at him with empty, vacant eyes, still clutching their weapons in death. He began to shiver even more. Involuntarily his hand raised towards a pocket of his vest and opened it. His fingers fumbled around until he found... ~~ And here's the story I wrote. You'll want to have a bit of time to spare to read it, it itself is about 5 times longer than the introduction. ^^ War (Click to View)
... a small, smooth stone, tied carefully to a bit of string. He looked down at his hand, the stone shining a brilliant blue even in the growing dark. His shivering slowed as a warmth different from the growing cold began to flow through him, and he lowered the stone to again survey the battlefield. He could see friends, lying bent and broken, amongst the carnage, and his stomach fell. He'd lived with these people, argued with them, joked with them. They had all set out this morning confident of victory. Victory! How could we all have been so naive?! We'd thought they had been walking out to meet an opposing army of savages of lesser numbers. An easy win, surely. In reality, we had marched out into the valley, and nothing was there to meet us. It was already too late. The supposed savages had allied themselves with another army that was supposed to be on our side, and out of nowhere the members of that army amongst our ranks had begun attacking us. As we'd struggled to regroup and fight back, the savages had come from all sides with weapons and monsters unlike anything we'd ever seen. We'd all fought with our best, but it wasn't a war. It was a massacre. He looked over his shoulder at a gigantic beast's carcass. That massive, deformed creature had attacked from the left, plowing through everyone and everything, it's eyes ablaze with a primal rage. He'd seen it tear apart friend and foe, and in an instant of his own rage for his fallen friends, he'd charged it as it lunged at him. His katana pierced through the beast's upper jaw as the beast's teeth sunk into his shoulder. The momentum of the beast carried it over him before he could get away, and then it all went black. When he came to, he found his armor, despite being cracked and nearly broken, supporting the bulk of the dead monster's weight. After realizing he could still move, he struggled, barely managing to get out from under the thing, and retrieved his sword as he looked around. It was all over, there was no one else. He looked away from his friend’s corpses, and began to slowly make his way forward. The dark of the night grew, The little light there was, was coming from the nearly full moon peeking through the clouds. The sickly light convulsed the scene before him as he walked into something he'd not even seen in nightmares. The dead bodies, their eyes, they seemed to scream in pain, in rage, they wanted to hurt, to kill as they had been... He wrenched his eyes away, looking to his side. More monstrous carcasses... we're they really dead? Did it just move? The shadows were playing tricks, they had to be, everything was dead... A shrill cry erupted from behind him. He jumped forwards, turning quickly but a little unbalanced as he landed. He couldn't see anything beyond the silhouettes of the dead warriors and beasts in the abysmal light. He blinked. A bead of sweat ran down the side of his face. His hand fell and tightly gripped the hilt of his sword that hung by his side. Nothing moved, the eerie silence felt heavy on his ears. Did he imagine it? For a moment, nothing happened. Again shrill cry, and then another, both high pitched and wailing like the first, broke out either side of him. His eyes widened in terror as from between the dead bodies glowing yellow eyes came into view, shining in the small light from the moon. He drew his sword as a cloud moved, letting the moon illuminate the valley. The creatures we're hunched over, almost crawling along the ground. He could hear the snarls now, the bright white fangs bared... He turned quickly, his shaking almost breaking his footing, as he swung at the monster that grew close. He missed... it jumped back, it's face contorted in rage... There was more of them. As the one already visible grew closer, others came out from behind the dead the dead and darkness, too many... He screamed at them as he spun himself in a tight circle, his sword arcing through the air, driving them back, but not enough... His balance wavered too much, breaking under the strain. He hit the ground, the wind was knocked out of him. His sword bounced out of his hand, he reached for it, but it went too far. He was going to die, like he should have, along with his friends... Amidst the cries of the monsters, the thudding of their feet drawing close, his own strained breathing, he heard something else hit the ground. His eyes looked down. A small, brilliantly blue stone sat on the dirt and crushed grass. "... check this rock out." He'd remarked, holding the stone up for her to see. "Wow... it's beautiful." She'd replied back, smiling. He'd let his eyes catch hers, and then had gazed back at the stone, smiling himself. "Yeah, it is. It reminds me of you." She'd laughed, catching him in an embrace... The warmth, more powerful than his fear, more powerful than anything surged through him. His shaking slowed, it stopped... He couldn't hear anything, no, yes he could, he could hear his breathing. He struggled upright and looked around. Where had the monsters gone? The dead soldiers... the monstrous carcasses... He got to his feet, listening intently. There was nothing. Nothing moved. Not the slightest whisper of noise came from anything besides himself. There wasn't any sign of them, or any sign of anything having been here since the army's battle. The sword still sat where it had fallen and surveyed the he blade, and then looked at the valley. The dead, his dead friends... He drove the sword into the ground, so it firmly stuck upright. His hand reached into his pocket and pulled out the bit of string, which must have come loose after all this time... Closing his eyes tightly as tears ran down his cheeks, he began to mutter... ... he stood back up and turned away from his sword, everything he wanted to say to his friends had been said and left with his sword, along with a small blue stone, tied tightly to a bit of string... He didn’t have to die, someone back home needed him more than his friends did... Tania is Ready for the Writing Challenge! - Taniaetc - 05-01-2010 I took Reaper's advice, and now rewriting/rephrasing/whatever my story... Here anyways. Yeah, quite long, once again. Die reading it (Click to View)
The cry of a single raven broke the silence of the night. The light of the moon threw nightmarish shadows, one of them being close to a human shape. For a few seconds the shadow laid on the wet grass of a park, then he began to move towards an old Victorian estate. As the raven cried a second time, the head of the shadow turned around and finally light fell onto the face of the man the shadow was belonging to. It was the face of an old man who had already seen too much in his life, but his eyes still radiated power and a strong will. After some more seconds he came to the great wooden door and took out a pack of picklocks. He tried the first one, but it didn't fit. A silent curse escaped from his mouth. Hectically he took out the next one and almost dropped it. 'Stay calm' he told himself. 'There is no need to rush.' Finally he managed to open the lock. He slowly moved the door. With a long and painful scream it swung open. He was there. Just one last step to go... The door was left open to bring light. He sighed as he watched his family’s old, enormous mansion. A pitch-black carpet was visible. A dusty picture of the old man’s family with their piano on the back was hanging on the wall. Those were the only things fashioning this house. There were many empty spaces. The old man’s family had moved without him, but fortunately they left a picture and their piano to show their love and attention. Slowly he walked in and then got close to the picture. ‘Years and years have passed, and now I’ve my sweetie old piano back,’ he whispered to himself while his hands were busy wiping out the dust. The old man’s name was Philippe. While looking at the picture, his past slowly but steadily came back to him. When he was young, his father used to teach him how to play the piano. He often hid in the garden or elsewhere safe to ‘delay’ his weekly piano lesson, but instead of delaying it, the hiding made the lesson even less entertaining and more boring. To his amazement, as he remembered his past, his father never gave up teaching him, showing that Philippe could be like him, a well-known pianist. Yes, I have learned that my future would be like this. Father, I will show you that I could be like you too, he thought. Then he took an old, plain white clothing used to clean the piano, now still lying in its usual place, a table nearby. The old clothing was never replaced, only carefully washed and gently cleaned, making it the only fabric able to delicately touch the black, large instrument to wipe out its dust and clean it up. ‘It has been a long time already, isn’t it?’ Philippe told the piano. A few minutes later he finished cleaning his family’s, or now his most cherished treasure. It had been a long time since he left his home to study architecture, which was now not interest him anymore. It seemed that music is in his blood, and not anything else. He started getting interested in constructing when he saw builders building another mansion next to his family’s. They were working together, one painting, one bringing bricks when others do what they could. Even the neighbours helped if they were idle. Philippe helped too while sneaking out from his music lesson. ‘I thought constructing was my interest, but no,’ he laughed nervously. Then he sat on a chair in front of the piano. ‘My place and future is you, my precious treasure.’ He took a music book filled with basic musical notes to complex ones. Then he opened the book, hands wiping the dust out. It seemed that everything in the mansion were dirty with dust except for the old fabric. It’s always clean, or is it cleaned by someone recently visiting or staying here? He thought. But nobody entered this mansion anymore. Father gave the keys to me. He said that he never trusted anyone else to look after this house. ‘Why hello!’ a voice greeted, breaking the peaceful silence he was having. An old yet mysterious man suddenly entered Philippe’s mansion. He was wearing a black tuxedo with a black tie. ‘Who are you?’ replied Philippe, confusion and fear all mixed up on his face. ‘I am the estate’s new owner. Who are you to dare trespass this mansion?’ The man’s face was almost blank, but Philippe could recognise him. ‘Don’t you remember? I’m the owner’s son. My family left a long time ago, and I was given this mansion to stay in,’ he blurted out. ‘Oh. I’m sorry. Shame on myself I do not remember my own friend. I’m just checking around,’ he laughed as he walked in. ‘So why did you drop out from your study?’ he continued. ‘I’m no longer interested in construction. My life depends on this,’ Philippe stood and touched his old piano. ‘It’s good to have it back isn’t it? I need your help.’ Thomas, the estate’s new owner said. His eyes felt sore, but he felt compelled to see his old friend. ‘Really? You’d ask me for help? That would be a great honour.’ ‘Yes. And by doing that, I could help you of becoming a great pianist too,’ offered Thomas. ‘But how?’ ‘Firstly you can practice playing music for me to prove that you’re good enough. Then I’ll set up a gathering at the park tomorrow. The guests are this estate’s buyers. They are looking for a peaceful and quiet location like here. If you play nice, they would approve and buy the houses. They would come to your mansion every month and listen to your music. Good deal? I get the money, you get your skill back,’ he explained. Philippe thought for a while, and then nodded in agreement. He sat back and started playing ‘Greensleeves’. ‘Hmm, hmm, it’s a quite relaxing music. I love that. They would be happy about this,’ laughed Thomas approvingly, smiling at his best friend. ‘Do you have some more? Soothing music would throw off this nightmarish night,’ he said. Philippe turned the music book’s page, now showing ‘Canon’. He stopped for a while and then gently landed his fingers on the ivory keys, eyes still focusing on the page. As he played, Thomas sometimes closed his eyes, imagining how his guests would say about this. ‘I’ll leave you alone to practice. See you tomorrow, meet me at the park. There’ll be a piano placed there, so the guests won’t get in your house,’ he walked out and waved goodbye to his friend. Philippe waved back and then practiced until he felt drowsy. As he walked to his bedroom he wondered what would happen next, hoping that he would be like his father. He managed to sleep for a few hours. It was morning now. Then he walked outside to the park. The sun was shining dimly, radiating hope that he would achieve his goal. ‘Welcome, Phil! Come! Let me introduce you to the others,’ Thomas greeted. Philippe wanted to smile, but something in his voice made it impossible to. ‘My fellow guests, this is Philippe. He is a pianist who is doing quite well. He’d play monthly for us,’ he announced when the guests were gathering near him. ‘And today, he will play quite nice music for us.’ Phil walked to the new instrument, almost identical to his, and sat on the seat next to it. He placed his fingers on the keys, barely remembering the musical notes. He could barely remember them, but his strong will forced him to, and finally he started to play ‘Fur Elise’ as the audience sat. He managed to remember all of the notes. Applauses broke the silence after he finished. Then he played ‘Canon’ in a soft, slow pace. ‘This would be a great day to me. Everyone smiled, making me content. Dad, now I’ve proven that I worth to be a musician,’ he told himself as he continued to concentrate. Oh, forgot to state that beginning 1 is 195 words long. My story's 1368 (with beginning) words which sucks. WHY DO I WRITE TOO LONG?! And btw, please read it. Please guys! I wanna be a great writer! RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Magnamancy - 05-01-2010 I don't know how apt I am at judging stories, as I tend to unintentionally superimpose my own style, but I'll have a look Taniaetc. ^^ ... alright, nice. It's pretty coherent, the story is followable and relatable to an extent, I'd call it a pretty good effort. As for advice, most prominently, use of paragraphing wouldn't go astray. Simply breaking the text up into suitable paragraphs would make it much easier to read. I could give you an example if you like. RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Reaper - 05-01-2010 Don't think you have to write in here, Phil. You never should force yourself to writing. I did that quite sometimes as well, but I never was satisfied with the result. Just a small edit from my side. I only changed the diary entry, now it sounds a lot better and realistic to me. Still, any improvement suggestions are welcome. Very nice stories, both of you. This is going to be a tough vote( especially if one or two more are going to join) Hunting forever (Click to View)
The cry of a single raven broke the silence of the night. The light of the moon threw nightmarish shadows, one of them being close to a human shape. For a few seconds the shadow laid on the wet grass of a park, then he began to move towards an old Victorian estate. As the raven cried a second time, the head of the shadow turned around and finally light fell onto the face of the man the shadow was belonging to. It was the face of an old man who had already seen too much in his life, but his eyes still radiated power and a strong will. After some more seconds he came to the great wooden door and took out a pack of picklocks. He tried the first one, but it didn't fit. A silent curse escaped from his mouth. Hectically he took out the next one and almost dropped it. 'Stay calm' he told himself. 'There is no need to rush.' Finally he managed to open the lock. He slowly moved the door. With a long and painful scream it swung open. He was there. Just one last step to go... He stopped for a moment to take a deep breath. It had taken him twenty years to get to this point. A few more seconds wouldn't matter. He left the door open and looked around. Gloomy light came from somewhere above, but his eyes already got used to the darkness. In a corner he noticed a broad stairway with a blood-red carpet on it. The source of light was up there and his target probably was as well. As he climbed up the stairs, he envisioned a stream of blood running down the carpet and melting with it's tone. It would vanish like it's owner. But no, he told himself. This was not about assuaging his bloodthirst. It was just about revenge. Cold, determined revenge. Lost in his thoughts he hardly noticed that the stairway had ended, revealing a long corridor. At its end, light fell out of a half-opened door. Soft-footed, he approached it while taking a silver dagger out of his coat. Somehow he managed to get through the door without moving it. Now there he stood, a dark figure, surreptitious like an assassin, in the corner of a dark room with his victim lying on a bed in front of him. Next to it there was a small table with a candle on it. After twenty years... Twenty years of plotting his revenge... And now he was so close. So close to the man who had taken everything from him. The man who had killed his wife and burned down his house. Who had destroyed his life. But tonight, this would end. He came closer and raised the fist with the dagger. As he was about to jab out, he noticed a small book with a violet binding on the bedside table. The word “diary” was on it, written in calligraphic letters. He wanted to end this as fast as possible, but something made him open the book. Maybe he wanted to understand why all this had happened, maybe he wanted to understand why that man had done all this to him and maybe he hoped to find solace by understanding it. He didn't know, but he opened it anyway. “Dear Diary,” it said on the first page. “I'm starting to write to you because something happened. Something terrifying. Something I can't keep for myself. I killed somebody. A woman. I can still see her face when I close my eyes. I didn't want to kill her! Just because I was hungry I broke into her house. The only thing I wanted to have is something to eat! But somehow she must have heard me rummaging the kitchen. And then suddenly she was in front of me, with a knife in her hand. In my panic I grabbed for one as well, but as she noticed my movement she stabbed forward. Probably she just feared for her life like I did. The same mortal fear depriving me of my senses. As a reflex I raised my knife and she ran into it. Just a reflex... I didn't want to kill her.” Some scrawly and crossed lines he couldn't read followed. “When I sat there next to her dead body, I couldn't even realize what had happened. My biggest anxiety was that I might have been put to jail. Jail! What are 10 years in jail compared to this? But in my fear I couldn't grab a single clear thought. Trance-like I took books and wood and.., everything I could find, stacked and burned them so that no one would find out. But as I came out of the house, her husband, maybe having seen the flames and the smoke, descried me. I ran away, hiding from justice.” He skipped a few pages. “It have been ten years since then and still I can't stop myself from thinking about it. Neither at daytime nor in my dreams. It is probably going to hunt me forever. I wonder how her husband is feeling now. Does he hate me? Of course he does. How does he live on? Does he think of it every day like I do? Or doesn't he even live anymore? I wish I could talk to him and explain what I did, but I fear his reaction. Maybe he would kill me. But well, maybe that's a fair punishment for my misdeeds...” At that point he closed the book and turned his head to look down at his former enemy. All this years, he had thought he was hunting a monster. And now he realized that this man suffered as much as he did. Somehow he felt an affinity to him. A single event had bound them together for a lifetime. He could still kill that man, but it didn't mean anything to him. Furthermore, wouldn't he be the cold, deadhearted monster if he did so? He took the pen lying next to the book and wrote “I forgive you” on the last page, then he left through the open door. RE: Contest #9: Writing challenge - Elias - 05-01-2010 Okay I'm rewriting my horrible story. I hope its okay for you Magnamancy if I copy how you made the beginning look. Yeah this should be better (Click to View)
~~ The sun went down beyond the horizon and painted the landscape in blood red. Blood! As if he hadn't seen enough of that the last months. His glance wandered around on the battlefield. Finally it was over. After three month, silence came back into the vale for the first time. But it wasn't a peaceful silence. It was frightening. He shuddered and was about to go back the way he came from, but he had to walk to the other side of the valley. The smell of death normally would have been hardly endurable, but he got used to it over time. This, however, didn't apply for the sight presented to him. Dead soldiers of both sides were lying next to each other, looking at him with empty, vacant eyes, still clutching their weapons in death. He began to shiver even more. Involuntarily his hand raised towards a pocket of his vest and opened it. His fingers fumbled around until he found... ~~ ...a napkin was in his pocket and he took it out to clean his sword. It was stained in blood, in pure red blood from a human flash. He cleaned his sword and threw the napkin away. He walked amoung the dead soldiers, still looking at him with empty, lifeless eyes. He got near a soldier who was wearing cloths similar to his. He put the napkin in the dead man's hands and said "rest in peace, my friend." He then turned around and started to walk back to where some man were walking. The people in front of the man had military uniforms, blue light cloths, with shoulder protections, and swords buy their sides. Some were ridding with horses and who road a horse had a long blue/white capes, and spears instead of swords. All of them stopped except one who started to ride his sword to the man. "Everyone is dead in here," said the man to the rider. "I'm the only survivor, the general is also dead, he is over there. About 20 arrows shot him, he survived the arrows but a spear was thrown in his chest." The rider looked at the field. "Good work Karus, at least we were able to stop the enemy in such great numbers but still many man had died, and many good man had died, I guess it is hard to be a lieutenant. Watch many man die, allies and foes." Then the rider got out of his horse. "I have a message for the general, but since he died this message goes to you." The messenger gave him a letter that was rounded like a scroll. The message said Dear General Lee (if the case that General Lee dies, then this message is for the highest man in command.) If you got this message then your main mission was a successful one. We have send a some supplies and some small army to your help. With this message their should be 50 soldiers, 10 horseman, 15 archers, 5 medics, and 20 footman. More help is coming, but they will arrive in a week, no more. We just ask you to stay in your post and wait for further commands. Some enemy armies might come in near future, but there are small in numbers so don't worry. About 10 professional assassins from our army should soon come, they have more information on the further mission for you. For now just rest and wait. "This is all their is to say in here," asked Karus. "Yes, we were only ordered to help out the army, but I guess we are now the army, said the rider. They both walked to the small army force that was send. "This all that is left from the battle, one lieutenant, it could be worse," said one of the riders. "Okay now, I'm in command because, the message says so. If you listen to me we might survive, if you will do what you please than all of us will be dead, understood." "Yes, sir, yes," said the small army. "Are you sure there is no survivors," asked one of the medics. "You want to go and see the field of dead man, trust me, if someone was alive they would try at least to breath or to speak, I walked for hours before yo came, no survivors," said Karus in a dark, and lifeless voice. The army made a camp, there was one large campfire that was made to get some heat and to cock food. Four soldiers, and Karus were keeping a watch during the night. It was cold, dark, and moonless night. The only source of light was the campfire. All waited in silence, and they could only hear the sound of burning wood, nothing else. Karus was pocking the fire with his sword while the guards were holding on to their spears, feeling tired. After long hours a chilly breeze came, and all were tired and cold, even Karus. Karus looked around, but it was really dark to see anything clear, but he did saw some figures moving. He told the guards quietly to be ready. When the figures came closer Karus could make out who or what they were. The figures looked a lot like merchants. They had a wagon that was carried by a horse. "Hello their Karis, long time no see," said one of the merchants. Karus smilled and said, "Ah, Rodey, yes long time no see. It's strange to see you a merchant." Than Karus showed a sign to the man to calm. Merchants got closer to the campfire to be fully seen. They wore blue bandanas, and blue light cloths. They sat near the campfire near Karus. "Who are they lieutenant," asked one of the soldiers. "They I don't know, but this person I know. He used to be in the army with me but left, because he wanted more adventure, and being a high commander didn't allow him that, that is why I also dropped down," said Karus in a sleepy voice. "Who did you used to me lieutenant," asked the same soldier. "Oh I was a general, but I didn't want to be in charge of an army." For two days Rodey stayed but then left. On the fourth day of camping something was about to happen. It was night time. Warmer than the first time and the moon had finally showed. Karus was on watch this day. He let everyone else rest and stayed alone. He was still pocking the firewood in the fire with his sword. He heard some noise, noise that sounded like someone walking really carefully. He looked around without turning his head. He then relaxed, but at the same moment a man jumped behind him with a sword. He quickly got up and slashed the man before he could touch him, and made a small burn mark where he cut the man because his sword was lightly burned from the fire. Than three more man with swords charged at Karus. "Everybody wake up," screamed Karus, while fighting the three man. All of soldiers got up, but they didn't look at the man who tried to kill Karus, but they faced Karus, all of them. They got their weapons, but didn't looked like they were going to help him, but they looked as if Karus was their enemy. Five foot soldiers charged at Karus. He barley killed them. Then the three unknown enemies attacked Karus, but he was able to kill them. In the end he killed everyone who was in the camp, all who was trying to kill him. He was out of breath, and breathing very heavy. Than six more of those man came from behind. He grabbed his sword put the tip of his blade in the fire, and quickly charged at his enemies. He was able to kill them, all 60 men, 20 foot soldiers, 15 archers, 5 medics, 10 horseman, and 10 who looked like assassins. He then walked around the camp. He found the man who brought him the message. He saw that he carried another latter. It was said to kill Karus, and that the 10 assassins were to do the job and if the assassins were to fail, that the whole army should kill Karus. Hey couldn't understand why they wanted to kill him, but then it stroke him. He was a well known in most tactics, and knew everything their is to know how to defeat any army. Karus had great knowledge to who he served and he did dropped down, he says that he dropped down because he didn't want to be in command but everyone else who was in charge of the whole army didn't believe him. They believed that he meant to betray him, and gain wealth, fame, and anything he wanted from the opposing army. Karus knew that he will soon has to face about a thousand soldiers by himself. He went to the supply tent to get oil, arrows, bow, spear, and some dried grass for horses. He then spread the dried grass on the field, and other things that would be set on fire. He then changed the arrows to be able to be set on fire, and the spears tip he wrapped in cloths that absorbed oil. He then the rest preparation for the battle. He waited for the seventh day. He looked at the horizon and saw about a thousand soldiers with spears, bows, swords, and polearms. They where about 200 meters away from him. "Give up traitor, we know about your skills, but you can't defeat us, you will end up dying," said the man in charge. "Maybe I will die, but I'll show you to what happens when you try to kill one of your comrades. You send 60 men to kill me, and they failed, even when I wasn't prepared. So how do you think this battle will end when I was prepared for a long time," said Karus. "You might kill 20 men, but that is the maximum." "Well come and see," and so Karus set one arrow on fire and shot it on the middle of the field. The man in charge smilled but his face turned to shock when he saw the arrow land on dry grass, and whole battlefield was set on fire. Everyone screamed in pain but Karus was prepared, and wore enough cloths to protect him from the flames. He then got the spear, and charged the whole army. The spear's tip was set on fire so he easily killed his opponents, and horses. He was barely attacked because everyone tried to get away from the flames. The flames had died about 15 minutes after the battle had started. Most people were on ground laying in pain from the burns. Karus already defeated about half the army. He then fought with his burned sword. The battle was lasting already for an hour and no one was able to kill Karus, but he was already tired and almost out of breath from wearing too many cloths. Karus was left with only 100 people. He had his many cloths off, and he was cut many times and had ten arrows on his back. He then charged at them and...... |