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"Disaster in my private life..." - Sharkitoon - 07-09-2009
Sometimes i wonder why everything is so slow...
When the boss give me a job to do,
I do it fast, I walk fast, I run fast, I like being fast.
So when i need to use the MRT, i used the stairs instead of the slow excelator...But the thing is that i have to wait for the mrt...
And that is the reason why i walk whenever i want to go anywhere.
So last week, i received my driving license,
It was the happiest day of my life,
now i can go anywhere fast, now when i want to go to work,
i drove 150 km/hour, as i see no traffic police chasing me,
I start taking speeding for granted, and start speeding up to 160 km/hour.
And today i have a meeting at kuala lumpur at 12.00, i started driving by 9.00,
I reached the malaysia kastam(Passport Demand place) at 9.30
It takes more then 2 hours to reach kuala lumpur,
So i sped up until 180 km/hours, after a while i hear the sound of siren, it's the traffic police.
'i have no time for this' i thought and sped to 190 km/hour
All kind of bends i have passed but still the traffic police is still behind me.Than i realise that the track that i'm driving on didn't have any lights on.
i just kept on until i see a sharp bend, and quickly try my luck, hoping to lose the police,
Because of the speed i'm on,
'''I drove off the cliff'''
While falling to the foot of the cliff,
Everything that i did wrong flashes before my eyes,
That's it for me...it's the end...i'm gonna meet the angel of death.
But somehow a tree in the middle of the cliff slowed my falldown,
Everything surrounding me was a mess,
i was a mess too...
I tried to move my hands and legs but it's not possible...
I don't know if it's a sign i'm dead or i'm broken...
----------------------------------------------------
When i woke up,
Everything was white,
Even i'm wearing white...
"Where am i? How come i'm in heaven?"
Then a woman entered all in white too
"no...you're not dead yet...we need to insert steels in your hands and legs...it will give some support for your broken bones"
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - snorsorbet - 07-10-2009
There are some grammatical mistakes but you can still easily understand what you mean and hang on to your story.
Overall I didn't like it because it feels like I've heard it so many times before.
But the ending was very good. It was kind of sudden and surprising, but that was what made it good.
You can always go further into detail, but the fact that there only was one dialogue wasn't bad in this story.
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - Sharkitoon - 07-10-2009
Nope...no editing...it's just a simple story i wanna share...
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - Azriel - 07-10-2009
that's rather amusing, seeing that I was in kuala lumpur for 5 days (just got back).
Azriel~
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - martinpaul12 - 09-24-2009
Hi Shariktoon,
This is really heart-touching story posted by you. I liked the story very much. Hope you will continue writing these type of stories for us.
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - Ragor - 09-24-2009
Erm, I'm thinking this was a story that popped up in your brain, am I right?
Heartwarming, indeed, but the main person in the story learned 2 lessons today. One is Don't go fast everytime. The second is driving reckless can, indeed, get you in an accident
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - Silverthorn - 09-24-2009
And you two should've also learned a lesson by now. No gravedigging.
RE: "Disaster in my private life..." - Sharkitoon - 12-08-2009
Thanks guys,
trust me, i didnt expect this story to be very good.
Okay i'll make more stories for you guys.
Sorry for being away for sooo long
Well i'm back now so
Sit tight
Make yourself comfortable and
Be there for my stories =)