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my poetry - MnM - 05-25-2010
MOTHERS SUNDAY
she cares for you
each and every moment you live,
every movement you make.
makes sure you dont go beneath.
Not just for her sake
She took copious pain
to have given you birth
The earth seems big to look,
when you compare it to the mother's heart,
its like a tiny drop of water in mighty oceans
Mother takes esctacy
when the tot cries.
she takes it as the tot console,
her for the pains and cries:
told on a mothers sunday.
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RE: my poetry - lf2TimmE1 - 05-25-2010
i transformed ur poem into some drawing...
![[Image: poem.png]](http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/3200/poem.png)
or did i understand it wrong?
RE: my poetry - MnM - 05-26-2010
actually u understood it but u cannot express it correctly. ok here is description:
The poem is about the characteristics of mother. the mother cares for the child , each and every moment the child lives and care of each and every movement it makes. she looks the child with care and makes sure it doesnt go beneath. she does all these things not just for her sake but with a reason that it needs to shine.The mother took lots of pain to have given birth to child. The earth seems big to look but when you compare it to the mother's heart it is like a tip point of a hook (like safety pin) .The mother takes happiness when the child cries . she takes it as the tot console her for pains and cries. These things are told on a mothers sunday.
I need some C&Cs pls i need it fast.
RE: my poetry - Bamboori - 05-26-2010
(05-25-2010, 06:23 PM)firzenx Wrote: Mother takes esctacy
not mine :P
RE: my poetry - MnM - 05-26-2010
most of em takes it. ^^
RE: my poetry - Alectric - 05-26-2010
thats a pretty big generalisation ^
and its definitely not true, because a large amount of drugs would be needed to make it true.
like, boat loads of drugs.
lol
RE: my poetry - LutiChris - 05-26-2010
(05-26-2010, 05:04 PM)Bamboori Wrote:(05-25-2010, 06:23 PM)firzenx Wrote: Mother takes esctacy
not mine :P
neither would mine... :\
RE: my poetry - Marshall - 05-27-2010
mine doesn't need ecstasy to go out of her mind anyway *sigh*
RE: my poetry - MnM - 05-27-2010
Actually may be not foreign mothers(to me) but Indian mother takes ecstasy.Guys may be u understood it wrong.. ^^' i said that when the tot cries she takes ecstasy. not to u grown up bastards.
RE: my poetry - Alectric - 05-27-2010
i read through a poem by firzenX,
i wish i had a giant T-rex,
Firzenxs' poem seems to generalise,
my t-rex can shoot lasers from its eyes,
Drugs seems to be an addressed issue,
If T-rex sneezed, it would need a massive tissue
lf2timmE1 made a weird picture,
A laser shooting T-rex is an awesome creature,
Sorry for posting my poem,
For the T-Rex, little is known.