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Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire - Sharkitoon - 08-19-2010
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RE: Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire - oliveryungo - 08-19-2010
A piece of advice- don't have so many stories at once. Always complete one and then work on another one. It's easier that way.
On the story itself:
Your tense is really starting to confuse me.
It looks quite interesting, though. Fairly good tension.
RE: Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire - Sharkitoon - 08-19-2010
Yea, well, this is a story I'm working on when i have a free time at school. But ' Into The New World ' is a story i work on at home or library.
Yea I'm really bad at tense and grammar.Sorry bout that
I'm trying to learn that in school
RE: Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire - Marshall - 08-19-2010
No build up of suspense.
I read it, waiting for something to happen perhaps in a more gradual manner, so when suddenly the dragon appeared it does not feel climatic at all.
RE: Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire - Sharkitoon - 08-19-2010
Yea i acknowledged that when i was writing it.
It wasn't rushed but I have no idea of the suspense.
And i know i lack of details.
(^_^)