07-21-2013, 03:16 PM
- I can still see grammatical errors.
- I do appraise the plot, the names could be better. Dark Forest sounds bit too generic for my liking.
- I think speech passages should be placed in line breaks. Eg:
- Use more punctuation, commas, quotation marks, semicolon, etc.
- I do appraise the plot, the names could be better. Dark Forest sounds bit too generic for my liking.
- I think speech passages should be placed in line breaks. Eg:
Quote:Davis: blablablub- A space should be added after every period (fullstop).
Louis: blablablub
Davis: ^%&*(#
Louis: heh
- Use more punctuation, commas, quotation marks, semicolon, etc.