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Taniaetc: The Beginning - Taniaetc - 04-03-2010

Yes, you are going to read my first story ever!
Actually, this is not my username, it's my novel k?
Firstly read the spoiler.
Slogan(? dunno how to say it) (Click to View)
You need to know this (Indonesians don't need to) (Click to View)
And here it is!
Chapter 1 - Strangest Thing Happening (Click to View)
Chapter 2 - First Day of The Last Year Again (Click to View)
All the chapter's not finished, now improving in it >.<
Sadly I'm gonna be busy so progress will be so slooooow.
AND I NEED SOME ADVICES AND FEEDBACK PLEASE! REPLY!
Thx,
~Taniaetc


RE: Taniaetc: The Beginning - Magnamancy - 04-03-2010

It's not bad for a first effort. :)
It's kinda engaging, some grammar issues, but they tend to get better
with time.

If you're looking for examples of what I mean:

"... I sprang out and jumped crazily."
could be better phrased as
"... I sprang up, jumping like crazy."

or

"... She eyerolled."
could be
"... She rolled her eyes."

It's the kind of thing you get used to though, so don't worry too much.
;)


RE: Taniaetc: The Beginning - Taniaetc - 04-05-2010

Thanks Magna (can I call you that?).
I'm atm not @ my laptop so I won't be able to update the story.
Also I'm thinking about a new title, "Knights of Silent Voice" isn't that good?
People who're good in writing stories I NEED YOUR HELP!
edit: Updated the story in grammar issues. Now it's fixed. Thanks again!