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The Good Ol' Times - YoShockray - 04-09-2011
This is my first story!
[spoiler
rologue ]Once upon a time there was a man, a man without name... He was strange looking don't know why but only thing that you could see was his cloak all over him and strange bumps on his back. That man was loner, he fought his way to the local secret sheriff and he was friend with none and foe with everyone. There was one who was very interested in stranger's life. Man called YoShockray.[/spoiler]
NEED NAME (Click to View)
ALSO NEED NAME (Click to View)
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RE: The Good Ol' Times - Divisor - 04-09-2011
(04-09-2011, 05:43 PM)YoShockray Wrote: That man was loner, he fought his way to the local secret sheriff and he was friend with everyone and foe with everyone.wat
All I can say is, try to improve your grammar. I can tell you more when you write some more.
RE: The Good Ol' Times - empirefantasy - 04-09-2011
I voted for a comedy.
If it would be a comedy,I hope to be really funny.I am ready to read.
off topic:
Did everyone read my new character? http://www.lf-empire.de/forum/showthread.php?tid=6183&pid=116966#pid116966
RE: The Good Ol' Times - bashscrazy - 04-09-2011
and strange bump on his backs.
should be
and strange bumps on his back.
and how can a LONER have friends.. if he's a loner then he has no friends.. and as Divisor pointed out... how can he be friends with everyone and be enemies with everyone at the same time..?
RE: The Good Ol' Times - YoShockray - 04-18-2011
Two new chapters wich need name and little prologue remake!
RE: The Good Ol' Times - Reaper - 04-23-2011
Sorry for such a late reply, but I've been away quite a bit and... what are a few days in the stories section? :P
First of one two words: Longer chapters. Just look at some of the other stories in here to get an impression of how long a single chapter should be (and how you achieve that length).
Grammar/spelling stuff: Keep in mind to use 'a' and all kinds of prepositions, stay in one tense, use a space after each dot and comma. Also it's aka(also known as)/alias, not AKKA.
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