Deadly past

[Zabobula]

Hope you are ready for this:
Honestly, the story needs work. There are several grammar errors but its the punctuation that throws me off. U need to start including some commas and what not. It seems like you're not following the very rules you set up. O_o
As far as me liking it personally, the concept is pretty aged. Not saying that I dont like it. Its ok...but you got some work 2 do "mod". :P

[The Lost Global Mod]

ah crap.. i knew i should have closed it...
well.. i am reworking it already.. ( i know when i wrote crap)
so i hope you ppl can wait for a better version..
btw i wonder how you figured out the whole concept only through the prologue... you don't know even an 1/1000 of the story's concept :P
i hope you don't take offence.. but you should wait a little more before you judge the concept..

[Zabobula]

I didn't say the "whole" concept. It's just the beginning concept that seems dated imo.