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~Little Fighter~
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~Little Fighter~

~Little Fighter~




Introduction:
A long time ago, something big was going to happen in a far, far country on the other side of the world! I will tell you about, what happened there, and no, I did not create this story, this really happened! I saw it when I was a young man! So listen and do not interrupt me! I'm going to tell this story only one time!





Chapter One
The boy was playing with his brand new ball on the street, kicking it onto the wall again and again. His father bought him the ball some weeks ago. That was the happiest moment in his life, because his mother died after his birth and his father was a drinker!
He drank 5-6 bottles of beer a day, so they had no money for other things! His father was very strict and evil, but since he got diseased a month ago he started getting nicer. Bat wished, his father would be diseased forever, but he knew he mustn’t be sadistic and egoistic!
He was stuck in his mind, when he heard an explosion from behind him. It was so noisy he had to cover his ears with his hands.
Bat turned around to find out where the explosion was. Then he thought nothing, stuck in silence. A small tear came out of his eyes!
The explosion came from his house! An army of tears went down his face, while he was running towards his house, screaming loud!
Nobody was looking what happened! Nobody was recognizing! His father! Did he survive? What caused the explosion? Why did god punish him so hard? He never did something evil in his life! Bat recognized a huge shadow, moving slowly, but knowing, towards him! He decided to stay, wait for the shadow! Did the shadow cause the explosion? "I will try to talk to him", Bat said to himself in mind. When the Creature went out of the fog and dust, Bat was as shocked as never before!




Chapter Two
Julian reminded!
He, the best, hugest, strongest and bravest fighter of their gang, lay on the ground. A hot, sweet pain made his stomach killing him!
His armour was not good enough! A silver arrow hit him into the stomach. After they found out that his armour was weak, he stood in a rain of arrows!
He sucked blood. His gang was defeated by the royal troops! The king itself ordered to destroy the gang, which was always against what the king said!
The battlefield was a road in the lion forest. The royal troops may have destroyed their village, Julian thought. He reminded his wife and his two children.
The soldiers may have killed them, and this knowledge hurt him more then the dozend arrows in his body! He prepared for death, thinking about nothing, just becoming one with the nature! A deep, inner peace came over him. Then he heard a voice, talking to him. Julian tried to stand up and see who talked to him.
It was a plasmic darkness, two red glowing eyes, a real demon! It suggested a pact with him, Julian, a nearly dead soldier! The demon would drive into his body and keep him alive. He would get incredible power! Therefore he had to sacrifice his mind to the demon. Julian agreed into the pact and then it happened. His mind was nowhere anymore, but his body got healed at once! A dark, very, very old might gave him incredible energies! Then another voice spoke in his head.
"Choose your way", said the otherplanetar voice! The demon decided to use the soul-elemental. Now he could absorb souls and compress the energy into terrible blasts! He remembered the king! He would kill him! Now! He turned around; his body was light like a feather. The he went straight towards the kings’ castle!
It was 5 years ago now, when he killed the king and proclaimed himself to the new ruler! It was easy for him to break all the minds of the soldiers. Now they were his slaves! Julian laughed. Yes, now he was the king.

A Knight came into the throne hall. "Our majesty!", He said.
"Speak", Julian replied. The knight told Julian that some stupid fools from Tai Home Village wanted to make a rebellion against him.
He decided to solve the problem at once, and sprinted out of the castle, into THV. Julian grabbed a guy walking around on the street, and "asked" him what he knew about the rebellion. The guy told him a name. Then Julian absorbed his soul. He went straight towards a house, preparing for a soul-bomb.




Chapter Three
Bat was as shocked as never before. This creature was over 2 meters high, muscular, dark skinned. Its eyes glowed red. A demon which drove into a body!
Bat thought the demon would kill him. But instead, the demon grabbed his arm with a strong movement which nearly broke it. Then the demon pushed some life-energy into Bat. Bat felt as great as never before! His hair grew, his muscles grew, and himself grew! He felt mighty now. Then the demon began to speak with a dark, loud voice: “I AM JULIAN, THE KING OF THIS COUNTRY! AND WHO ARE YOU?" Bat replied slowly and quiet: "My name is Bat, our majesty! Can I ask you a question?" "YEAH, ASK!" "Why did you destroy my house? You killed my father! Why didn’t you kill me?", Bat asked.
Julian replied: "I WILL ANSWER YOUR LAST QUESTION UPON HERE....“he said, "I DELETED A DEADLY INFECT IN YOUR BRAIN! YOU NEARLY DIED!"
"What the...???" "YOU FATHER MAY HAVE INFECTED YOU! HE WAS ALREADY DEAD WHEN I CAME! BUT I NEED YOU! YOU CAN BECOME A POWERFULL WARRIOR! DON’T YOU ALWAYS DREAM OF GETTING A MIGHTY WARRIOR?" "Yes, I do!", Bat said. Then Julian brought him into his castle, educating him, teaching him, making him to a powerful warrior. Bat did not know demons always lie!

The day came, when Bat heard a voice in his mind;
"Choose you way!", it said. Julian consulted him. Finally he decided to get a vampire. Julian laughed in his mind! He succeeded! He got a vampire for his army!

Master sat on a stone, watching to the floods of lifes in this country. He got nervous when he saw that Julian was going to skill a vampire!
The balance of twilight broke! He had to find some heroes for the good side! Otherwise the world would get destroyed by this evil demon!
Something like this never.....hey!....there! A possibility for a hero!... And there! Another one!
After 17 hours he chose 10 Heroes! Time for a start-off!
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Hum... Good storie, but need finish! ^^
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(11-09-2008, 12:07 AM)Hukko Wrote:  Hum... Good storie, but need finish! ^^

I agree with Hukkocool:D
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yay, was still writing, when you both posted!
3 chapters finished now!^^
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not bad, not bad at all. You have an interesting perspective of the Little Fighter story. I'd like to see more as well. A couple of grammar issues here and there but we all have them.
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Thx^^ well yes, it was 4:04 PM last night when i wrote it! XD
And now I continue!

Chapter Four
"Oh no, not you guys again", the young man shouted. He was surrounded by a horde from bandits and hunters.
"Yes, we guys again!", said their leader, a very huge and muscular guy. The young man replied:
"I have no money, dudes! You took it a week ago! I'm a poor man!" That was a lie. The gang-leader answered:
"We will see! Guys, grab him!" They started coming closer. Out of sudden, someone shouted:
"Davis, Davis! Come! Quick!.... What the...?!?!?" "Dennis, run away, hurry up now!", said the man called Davis.
Dennis replied: "I will never leave you alone in a fight, brotherheart!"
"Hey Mark!“, said a hunter, "Looks like we have very much luck today! Let’s also crush that guy!"
The leader told his gang to surround the both brothers.
A fight was unavoidable! Davis and Dennis, the both brothers, fought well, very well, but finally they had to get back!
"They are to much!", Dennis said, "We will get ourselves killed!" That was true! Mark was a horrible strong fighter, but Davis already broke him his left arm! Davis fightstyle was fist-based, Dennis' one kick-based, so the brothers were and awesome team! Almost over 30 Bandits and some hunters lay down on the ground. Then suddenly, another voice said: "Hey, Mark! Take a look upon here!" Mark turned around.
A guy jumped out of nowhere and broke the defense of the gang, using his knee while flying towards them. The brothers used the chance to attack mark, till he lay bloody on the dusty ground. The stranger knocked down all the gang members already. Then he came towards them.
They met in the middle of the battlefield. "Hy, my name is Woody, and who are you guys?", the stranger asked. "I am Davis and this is my brother, Dennis! Thank you for helping us in the fight! We would never....." Woody interrupted him: "Oh, that was no problem for me, I followed those guys since some days. Without your great work I could not have knocked them down! You both are having awesome fight skills!"
Dennis replied: "Oh, but yours are also great! Where did you learn fighting?" "I was a royal soldier, till this demon came into the palace and killed the king! A month ago! I had to get away, otherwise he would have killed me! I'm the only guy who escaped! All the other guys are his slaves now! He broke their minds!" "What the *censored*?!?", Davis said, "A demon! My, my ,my! Looks like dark times are coming up!"
Woody replied: "They are almost there! But tell me, where did you learn fighting?" "We are living on the street, so we had to learn fighting to defend ourselves against gangs and other evil persons!", Dennis answered, ashamed of the facts they lived on the streets.
Woody had an idea: "Hey guys, why don't we team up? I am also poor, but I know how to find something good to eat and to drink! Lets go into the Lions forest and try living there!" Davis and Dennis were interested! They never went out of the town, so they agreed.

Master, sitting on the floor, his eyes closed, was happy! Three of the chosen heros already found each other!
The elementar-keeper soon will contact them! Now he fixed his mind at another hero! Louis!




Chapter Five
Louis sat in the group of knights with whose he escaped out of the palace some weeks ago.
When that demon killed the king and forced his knights to follow his orders, he escaped with a group of 12 loyal knights into the lion forest.
He has been the knight-trainer in the castle, so this knights were really good fighters, but not as good as him!
Julian killed 5 knights with his evil magic! 2 got killed by his troops, so that he just had 5 knights now, but that would not make him stop teaching the knights!
Then he noticed a look! Louis always felt, if someone looked at him! "Come out", he shouted, "I've noticed you!". A voice replied: "Are you belong to the new king, or do you fight for the freedom?" "We escaped from Julian and we are fighting, yes even killing for our freedom!", Louis answered, "Come out now!".
A thin man came of of the trees, armed with a bow and some arrows. "So you are rebels?", he asked. Louis replied: "Well yes, we are! And you? Who are you?"
"My name is Henry and I'm a rebel since I'm born! I'm living in this forest and sometimes I kill royal troops! I don’t care who's the king!", said the man called Henry,
"So who are you?". "I am Louis, the knight-trainer! We are the only ones who could escape out of the palace! Do you want to join us? You could learn something helpful!", Louis offered. Henry accepted and joined their group. The sun disappeared behind the horizon.

It was midday, and the group was hunting some deers to boil them, when Louis heard some steps coming closer! "Run!", he ordered. Everybody ran away, even if they did not hear the steps, they knowed Louis' skills!




Chapter Six
Julian shouted: "NOW SHOW THEM TO ME!". "Yes Sir, I will do! Follow me please, Sir!", the sorcerer said and brought the king into the room where his team worked. In this room were five tables. On the tables lay bodys, covered by canvas covers. The sorcerer lifted them. Julian watched the body long, very long.
Then he said with the usual loud voice: "GREAT WORK JOHN! THEY ARE PERFECT! I WILL RANK YOU UP THEREFORE! GO KILL THE SORCERER COMMANDER AND REPLACE HIM! LEAVE ME ALONE NOW!" John replied: "Yes, Sir! I will do, Sir! Thank you, Sir", before he left the room. Julian laughed. Now he found out a way how to produce a new sort of warriors the world hasn't seen yet! Now he was ready! He charged soul-energy into the black skinned bodys, which were looking very similar to him, but were just half so large. It was finished! The five bodys stood up and moved towards Julian. Then they said altogether: "My Lord, I will follow you!". Julian named all the soul-warriors "Justin", like his dead son. "This sorcerer, John, needs to learn some new magic stuff!", Julian thought.
So he went into the room, where the old sorcerer commander lived. He saw John, a bloody knife in one hand, and a dead body, lying bloody on the ground.
"GOOD WORK, JOHN! I DECIDED TO TEACH YOU SOME MAGIC SORCERERS NEVER LEARNED BEFORE!", Julian said. "Yes Sir, Thank you, Sir", John replied.
Then they started, but Julian forgot the fact, that nobody except demons were capable of to use soul-magic. Finally, John got a half soul, half stun based magic out. His magic glowed way brighter then Julians soul magic, but he was satisfied to know some magic all the other sorcerers did not know! Now he was able to show them why he became the sorcerer-commander! Julian was also satisfied! It was time for a first meeting!

Master sat, as usual, on the ground and supervised all the lifes of the county. He was not god, but he had some similar skills, but way weaker and bounded at one specific country! "Julian got 2 new heroes and a new sort of warriors! I got 5 new heroes and 5 knights! I should put them together", Master thought.


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Hacked all the chapters into word and corrected typos and grammar-mistakes!
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hmm really good
is that idea with the tree and the meeting from my story? :D
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(11-10-2008, 07:07 PM)Lf2-hacker Wrote:  is that idea with the tree and the meeting from my story? :D

err, no!?!?
I just needed a place where they can meet.
I just wrote, and the idea came over me while writing.
but thx for the rewiev!^^
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Chapter Seven
"Wait!", Davis shouted while hunting the group of soldiers,
"Stop running away!" The guys continued running, so Davis, Dennis and Woody had to follow them, even if they were tired!
"All of those soldiers are wearing heavy armors!", Dennis said.
"Yes, exept the one with the bow!", Woody recognized, "Let's catch him!" The three fighters aimed at Herny and finaly, after a very long sprint, they got him and captured him. Woody had to knock him down.

After a while Henry awoke. "Oh my!", he complained, "You needn't punch so hard!" "Who are you?", Woody began the conversation. Davis intervented: "I am Davis, this is my bro Dennis and this is Woody. We saw your group running away. Why did you do that?"
Henry said to Davis, who asked the friendlier way: "I am Henry, a rebel, and thoes guys were also rebels who escaped from the palace. I guess you know what happened! Our Leader was Louis."
"Louis!", Woody shouted, "Yes, I know him! He was the knight-trainer!"
"Alright!", Henry replied. Dennis said: "Ummm, well, we know what happened and I think we should takl with this guy,....Louis...."
He took a look at Davis and Woody. They nodded and Dennis continued:
"Can you call them or ask them for a meeting?" "Ummm, well, yes I can. Le'me stand up now!" "DON'T", Woody shouted,"He will run away and we'lll never see him again!" "I won't!", Henry replied! "You will!", Woody answered! "No!" "Yes!" "No!!" "Yes!!" "NO MAN!!!" "I dont believe you, but it has no sense!", woody said angry, "If you see Louis, tell him that a bladebrother from the Lion Forest Battle wants to meet him!"
"I will do!", Henry said and stood up. "Bye!" He ran away, chasing Louis.
"We'll never see this guy again!", Woody said, "But good to know Louis also survived! We'll need him!" "Just let's see!", Davis said and sat down on the ground.


Chapter Eight
Julain took a look in the round. They sat in one of tousand rooms of the palace.
When Bat finished telling something about himself, Julian said:
"WELL, GOOD TO SEE THAT YOU KNOW EACH OTHER NOW! YOU ARE MORE THEN STUPID SOLDIERS! YOU ARE MY ELITE-CIRCLE NOW! THE "INNER CIRCLE"!
John, Bat, a swordsman and the two brothers llookedat Julian. "AND NOW I WILL SHOW YOU MY NEWEST INVENTION! JOHNS SORCERER WORKED HARD AND FINALLY"......*drummroll*......"I CREATED"........*drummroll gets louder*... "A NEW CLASS"......*drummroll explodes*..."OF WARRIORS! THE JUSTIN'S!"
*drummroll stops*
Julian showed them the power of the Justins and told them where to use them.
A shout. Another shout! Then a voice: "AAAAAAAAR! HELP ME! MAJESTY! HE....." The voice got cut of.
"What the f***?!?", Bat sweared. "I will care about that!", the swordsman said and stood up. Julian nodded.

The swordsman was running down the stairs, following the crys, shouts and dead bodys lying around.
Finally, he got in the throne hall. Dead bodys were lying around everywhere. He noticed a little star, stuck in a sorcerers arm.
A noise! The swordsman turned around. A ninja was standing in the door! How could he get there? The ninja was going to throw a shuriken at him, but the swordsman jumped up, so the shuriken missed him, and slashed his sword forewards.The blade was cutting the air. It began to glow red.
He thought, he could kill the ninja with 1 strike, but the strike missed. The blade hit the wall and the swordsman had to drop his sword.
"Your death's name is Rudolf!", the ninja whispered. Rudolf drew his both katanas. Before he could move, the swordsman had picked up his sword and shot a blast at the ninja. Rudolf's defense broke. "And your death's name", the swordsman whispered, "is DEEEEP!" He prepared for a sting. The blade moved forewards, straight up to Rudolf's heart. The ninja closed his eyes, waiting for death!

Chapter Nine
Master, Firen and Freeze were sitting in a circle of stones, their eyes closed.
Master had been chasing for them the whole day, till he finally found them. The last both heroes!
"Open your mind now and feel the sounds of the sky!", He said. After a minute, out of sudden a clear voice spoke to them.
"Choose your way!", it said. Master told Firen and Freeze to choose their power. Firen decided for fire-controll. "Most of the creatures on earth are fearing fire.", Firen commented his choice. Freeze chose the ice-power. "Wah, freezing things is so cool!", he said. Fire and Ice! A perfect team!
Master interrupted the both heroes, "Time to go now! Follow me!" "Where do we go?", Freeze wanted to know.
"Into the palace! We have to do something upon there!" "Oh my!", Firen complained, "Julian will kill us!" "We won't!", Master calmed him, "I'll make some Illusion spells for us! He won't even notice us!" "We'll see!", Firen said and continued walking.

In the night-Freeze and Firen were sleeping already- Master sat onto a big stone. He always did that if he had to think about hard and complicated thinks!
"2 Heroes escorting me, 5 Heroes at a meeting, one Hero chasing for me..." He thanked his old friend Dao for sending his pupil Rudolf to him, "....and 2 heroes who joined the evil!", He whispered. "....and a vampire under Julians controll! Oh my, that will be hard work!"
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Yes, I will continue writing the story now! ;)
You may have forgotten it already, so read it again and enjoy my new ideas!^^

Chapter Ten
"AND NOW", the ruler shouted, "YOU WILL SEE MY LATEST INVENTION!
IT'S A NEW TYPE OF WARRIOR WHICH USES SOUL-ENERGY TO MAXIMIZE THE DESTRUCTION!"
Some Justins started walking around in the arena of the colliseum of the palace. It was filled with humans this day. The ruler, Julian, organized a great party in the colliseum-room of the palace, where everybody in the county could get in for free this day. Julian arranged a big show to rise up his reputation. The Show was the perfect moment to show off his Justin-Warriors. A loud bell sounded. Some prisoneers got brought into the arena. The prisoneers got armed very carefully, when a second bell resounded. At once the Justins built up a straight formation prepared for a fight. The people knew what would happen next. With a load scream the prisoneers started running towards the Justins. Those did not move.
Some seconds before the prisoneers would have crashed into the wall of Justins, something happened, which made the people marveling and gabbeling. One of the Justins rose up his arms and created a huge ball made of soul energy, which flew towards the prisoneers. A small explosion blew the prisoneers away.

After half an hour of the Justin-show, where they showed off their skills,
Julian shouted: "YES, THATS THE NEW TYPE OF WARRIORS I INVENTED! I CAN CREATE THOUSANDS OF THEM AND THE WORLD WILL BE MI-- ERR-- OURS! ALL THE WORTHLESS AND WEAK NATIONS AROUND OURS WILL FALL AND ONLY WE AND OUR CHILDS WILL RULE THE WORLD!"
The people applaused and screamed loudly!
"Hey!", a man, covered with a large robe, whispered, "Are you Woody?"
"Of course I am", Woody answered, "Who wants to know that?"
"Woody, Woody, don't you recognice me? Don't you remember my voice?", the man asked him. Woody replied: "No, well,..... wait.....one moment...." "We can't wait now! Henry is waiting for me, I have to hurry up!" "Henry?" "A friend of mine." "Oh......Henry.....that Archer?"
"Allright, do you know him?" "I do!" "Then follow me!"

Woody and the mysterious man went out of the palace and walked some meters, when they finally stoped. An archer came along the way.
"Hehe, always accurate! I wish I could be as accurate as you, Louis!"
"LOUIS???", Woody shouted, confused. Only now the Archer noticed the man behind the covered Louis. "Oh!", he said, "Hello Woody!" "Henry?"
"Yes, it's me!" "And I fool didn't thrust you damn Archer!", Woody laughted. He hugged the both. "So it's allright! I need to go back and get my mates. Wait here!" Woody turned around and ran back into the palace.


Chapter Eleven

Rudolf closed his eyes, preparing for death.
Nothing happened. A minute stoke. Just nothig.
No noise, no pain! "Does the death feel like that?", Rudolf asked.
"Oh, you are not dead! Wake up man!", a deep voice replied.
Rudolf opened his eyes. Deep was still there...
...but frozen, standing in a cube of ice!
"My name is Freeze! Master sent me to fetch you!"
"Oh, my master Dao told me that someone would pick me up! Let's go now!" "Allright!", Freeze said, "But we shall take him with us!" He pointet at the frozen Deep. "Why?", Rudolf asked. "Master said so."

Master, Firen, Freeze, and Rudolf were sitting around the fire, where thay had told their live stories and how they had gotten there.
Now they were discussing what to to with the frozen Deep.
In the middle of the discussion, Master jumped up and shoutet "That's it!" Everybody was confused. Master shot a small, golden glowing lighning towards the frozen Deep.
He rebuilt Deeps charackter and memory, swaped some stuff, deleted Julians mindpolluting cobweb of informations and added new things.
After an hour, everybody else slept now, Master finished his work.
He woke up Firen, who melted the icecube Deep was caught in and warmed Deep up.

On the next morning Master sat on a stone, as usuall, and did his meditations. One hero found, another one recruited. The rest found themselfes. Only one hero left, but this vampire was also a big problem!
He had to get rid of it soon!



More follows soon, hope you enjoyed the new parts! ;)

btw, you may learn something about the charackters of the heroes.
For example Rudolf. He just got saved and at once he says "lets go now!". Very spontaneous!
Try to figure out those characteristic stuff and you'll understand some dialouges way better! :)
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