Little Fighter: Calm Before the Storm

[klodasmone]

In this chapter more of the plot is revealed. We see a lot of retrospective, reflection and inner monologue. I, like Davis, yearn for some action. But that’s how you built your narrative. While reading I get an ominous feeling of something unknown, something bad that is going to happen. This chapter was heavy for me. I liked the depiction of Freeze as the antihero. Though I am uncertain about the “seven years ago”, or maybe that was a memory from Davis’ childhood. How old do you imagine Davis is at the present? Overall, still a very suspenseful, if somewhat stagnant, chapter.

Grammar like usual:

discuss dealing with John -> discuss how to deal with John (style)
looking forward to the getting some action again -> looking forward to get on/in the action again (style)

@Reaper
I was misguided by the “the”, so I reworked the whole sentence, but now I can see that it’s correct.

Reaper edited this post 05-13-2011 08:16 PM because:

Note: 'To look forward to' is followed by a verb + ing. 'Getting' was actually correct, only the 'the' shouldn't be there. I know it's weird, but it's true.