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08-20-2012, 05:44 PM
What day do we have, the twentieth? Good, then I think I'm not yet gravedigging :P
I'm sorry Jed, I completely forgot that I had promised to comment on your stories. Well, better late than never I guess. Here goes:
The Incantation: The maximum wordcount was rather limiting, wasn't it? Good to have a short background story, but the end – to me - didn't really feel like one, it lacked the impact of the taverns one. Perhaps if you'd describe how they become that ultimate warrior instead of that they would.
Taking the story into account, the style was a tad too casual for my liking, but that's personal preference.
I liked the Grimoire story a lot more. The little 'struck by' wordplay was a nice start and the end left me smiling, which certainly is a good thing. I know that the word limit didn't leave you a lot of freedom to add something, but just a (half-)sentence that tells how he becomes drunk – or a drunk statement - before 'You're the drunkest' would have helped to make it less abrupt.
I liked the writing style in that one, it really felt like he was telling the story to someone. Good job with change of style between dialogue and description, too.
Also, good grammar and spelling
All in all, great job. It's kind of sad that you were the only one to take part. So much the more credit to you for writing those stories. But who am I to talk? I didn't exactly help in that department.gif ";)")
I intend to recompense for it, though.
~Reaper
I'm sorry Jed, I completely forgot that I had promised to comment on your stories. Well, better late than never I guess. Here goes:
The Incantation: The maximum wordcount was rather limiting, wasn't it? Good to have a short background story, but the end – to me - didn't really feel like one, it lacked the impact of the taverns one. Perhaps if you'd describe how they become that ultimate warrior instead of that they would.
Taking the story into account, the style was a tad too casual for my liking, but that's personal preference.
I liked the Grimoire story a lot more. The little 'struck by' wordplay was a nice start and the end left me smiling, which certainly is a good thing. I know that the word limit didn't leave you a lot of freedom to add something, but just a (half-)sentence that tells how he becomes drunk – or a drunk statement - before 'You're the drunkest' would have helped to make it less abrupt.
I liked the writing style in that one, it really felt like he was telling the story to someone. Good job with change of style between dialogue and description, too.
Also, good grammar and spelling
All in all, great job. It's kind of sad that you were the only one to take part. So much the more credit to you for writing those stories. But who am I to talk? I didn't exactly help in that department
I intend to recompense for it, though.~Reaper