Some Storie

[The Lost Global Mod]

okay... there we go.. *wushhh* evil-phil has appeared
nah seriously.. you can't call this a story... from the content its more an comic or something.
so..
pro:

1. you tried
   

con:

1. overuse of "then"
   
2. the content is surprising and confusing
   
3. no paragraphs (make it hard to read)
   
4. many spelling mistakes /typos
   

also.. some hints..

Some hints for rising writers:

• Write down what your story is about, you don't have to be excact just some keywords ( you don't will get lost)
  
• Write your story in an text programm like word or similar
  
• Before posting, check your spelling, nothing is more embarrasing than a stupid mistake
  
• Take comments serious, even if they hurt you sometimes , they will help you improve
  
• No master has fallen from the heaven.. not even in case of writing. its practice (you will get alot better if you write alot)
  

thats it.. commented enough?