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05-23-2009, 05:53 PM
(This post was last modified: 05-23-2009, 05:54 PM by The Lost Global Mod.)
just so that i get on sadbhav's nerves
LONG ESSAY FTW
anyways lets comment this properly!
Things i like
Things i hate or you should improve
Summary
All in all i like your story. Its thrilling, has an meaning (somewhere
)
and is written in your own style. I can't add more.. i just hope that you keep your own style, never change it in the middle of the story. Also i hope you keep your length of the chapters. The first one was at an admireable length, the second a little shorter but still okay. I hope it gets longer and not shorter (the length of the chapters i mean)
Final sentence ( i guess sadbhav is already dying.gif ";)")
) continue like this, write more, practice alot and get even better. thumbs up and good luck
(now sadbhav you have survived it)
LONG ESSAY FTW
anyways lets comment this properly!
Things i like
- The very own reaper-style.. your way of writing is just not copyable
- Your chapter are not so short (like in most of the other chapters)
- you added an prologue (it is not ESSENTIAL, but i just like it )
Things i hate or you should improve
- Nothing at the moment
Summary
All in all i like your story. Its thrilling, has an meaning (somewhere
)and is written in your own style. I can't add more.. i just hope that you keep your own style, never change it in the middle of the story. Also i hope you keep your length of the chapters. The first one was at an admireable length, the second a little shorter but still okay. I hope it gets longer and not shorter (the length of the chapters i mean)
Final sentence ( i guess sadbhav is already dying
) continue like this, write more, practice alot and get even better. thumbs up and good luck(now sadbhav you have survived it
)
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should totally allow people to be all trolley on their birthday
should totally allow people to be all trolley on their birthday