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The vengeance
#21
its a quotation out of a book of terry pratchett where the patrician talks to a fraud who should be hanged. And he wants to give him a last chance. :D
Do you know that book? Don't have to answer, maybe if you want to comment something next time.
and if your power is that thing with the stickman: The story would somehow have gone strange. Crimson stickmans, soldiers from another planet...
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(05-26-2009, 02:59 PM)Reaper Wrote:  its a quotation out of a book of terry pratchett where the patrician talks to a fraud who should be hanged. And he wants to give him a last chance. :D
Do you know that book? Don't have to answer, maybe if you want to comment something enxt time.
and if your power is that thing with the stickman: The story would somehow have gone strange. Crimson stickmans, soldiers from another planet...

While I was gone I realized that "Stickman" wasnt exactly a good choice for a race classification for my character. That's why you see "The Crimson One" in my signatures instead of the Red Stickman. I don't use that title anymore/
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finally my internet works again.
Well, I anyway hadn't got much time in the week, but now it will go on. So here is a part of the next chapter.
I guess it hasn't become that good, but its quite different to imagine what a person feels in a situation like that. Didn#t happen to me up to now :D
Enjoy!
Edit: Did a second part. This chapter will become very long, but foccused on the main characters. However you'll also be in there.

The ruins of my life

I sat there for hours, still with someone sitting next to me, embracing me. When I could open my eyes again without crying, I turned around. Next to me sat Marc, his eyes closed. He still embraced me, but in that moment I didn't care, it was even good to have someone telling you that you aren't alone with all those cruelty and madness.
When I felt strong enough, I turned my head to look at the dead body of my wife. I wanted to cry, but I couldn't. I felt totally empty, no tears in me, neither of happyness nor of mourning. Just nothing.
We sat there for around half an hour before I started to say something.
“How can anybody do something like that? Destroying lives without reason, without mercy?”
Marc said nothing, but I knew he couldn't. There wasn't an answer for that question. And even if it was, it wouldn't have helped me.
I knew that, but I needed an answer. To fill the emptiness, although it would have left another emptiness after realizing that what happened wasn't a dream. The emptiness of living with the memory and the certainty that what happened was irrevocable.
After some time I stood up, went silently to the dead body and picked it up.

We went to the hills to bury her.
The memory of that time is blurred, I wasn't thinking, I wasn't crying, I was just waiting to wake up out of that nightmare. But I didn't.
Only the time we stood in front of her grave is burned more clearly into my memory than anything else. I can remember the wind touching our hairs and blowing the scent of scorched wood to us.

And I can remember the look on her face. Somehow enraptured, looking up into the sky but still showing her fear in the last moments of her life. I can't forget that image. Whenever I think of her I see her face in that moment.
“Fare well”, was the only thing I could say before my words suffocated in tears.
Silent and motionless we stood there, I don't know for how long. Then a shadow appeared, human-like but completely dark and with a long cape. Two scary eyes looked at us from where the face should have been.
Without paying attention to us the shadow hovered to the dead body and raised his hand.
The body now being transparent stood up and floated out of the grave. It turned to me, looking into my eyes with a knowing smile, then it vanished. I never saw her face again.
I screamed at the shadow.
“You! You already took everything I fought for. Now you are taking her away again.”
“Everybody has to die.”
“But why now? Why her?”
“Every death is hard for someone.”
I looked at him in confusion. How could anybody be so cold, so heartless?
“Why are you doing that? How can you?”
I couldn't see the face of the reaper, but I was sure he wasn't touched by what I was saying.
“Without the death, would you esteem the life?”
“But why did she have to die so early? Why couldn't you wait?”
He looked at me. Calm, untouched, but not contemptuous.
“Am I the one who kills the people? Or are they the humans with their war, their hate and their cruelty?”
I was silent. I didn't know what I could say.
“I am just the one who has to look at what the humans are doing, releasing them from their pain. I am just the part of life the humans are more leaned towards.”
There was a deep pause.
“Will I see her again?”
“I don't know. You will have to find out by yourself.”
Another deep pause.
“So why should I live on? What holds me here?”
“I normally don't give advices for your life, but I tell you: Don't throw it away rash. You only have one life, but thousands of years afterwards.”
With this words he vanished, leaving me behind. It had already became dark and the moon was shining over the hills. I still looked into the direction where he had stood.
“No, I won't throw away my life. I will use it for the last thing left. Vengeance.”

He woke up, tears covering his face. The image of his wife's face was still in his mind, looking at him but he couldn't read her expression.
He looked around. Trees covered the sky, only a few beams of the moonlight got through the leaves. Leaves were also all around him on the ground.
Slowly the memory came back. He and Marc had their lair a bit away from the rebel's camp because Z and Fred had to talk to their leader before letting them in. In times like this you couldn't be suspicious enough.
They were already fallen asleep when they heard rumor from the direction where the camp was. Immediately they stood up to see what had happened. It was dark and the camp was quite far away, but they could already see flames gasping up for the sky.
Taking their swords they ran for helping the rebels. They couldn't see the army, but they already heard the noise of battle. They ran and ran with the camp coming nearer and nearer when both suddenly got knocked out by two hits with a club out of the dark. A quirk of the fate wanted them not to participate in the battle.
When they woke up again and wavered to the camp, they saw it all teared down. With blood and dead bodies the battle had left its marks. However the bodies weren't as numerous as the rebels had been. That ment that the rebels probably were just captured. Hope was still shining on the horizon.
They tried to follow the tracks of the army, but they were just too tired to walk on. As soon as they found a place to rest, they fell down and asleep.
So here they were, alone in the dark, the rebels caught, the army still marauding... What could they do now?

Suddenly horses were coming out of the thicket. Within seconds they encircled Cen and Marc, watching them concentrated while holding their bows and swords in their hands. Nobody moved, you nearly could feel the tensed attention in the air.
Then one of the riders dismounted his horse. He had long blond hair and sized them up with his calm brown eyes.
He turned to another man.
“I don't think that they have something that is worth the effort. But nevertheless we have to take them with us. Our leader doesn't want us to let people go off without him knowing.”
“So what are you waiting for? Let us go, take them with us and make sure they can't escape.”
Two of the men climbed down from their horses and followed Cen and Marc with their swords in front of them. There was no chance to escape.
As most of the bandits, what they obviously were, rode on horses, they set a brisk pace. However two swords in the back were a good motivation to run.
After some time which could have been half an hour, maybe even a full one, Cen wasn't paying attention to it, they reached the bandit's camp. It was even bigger than the rebel's one. It was obvious that this wasn't just a random gang. It was almost like an army.
They were guided through the camp with many people watching them. Many of them stared at them with empty eyes, many of them had shredded clothes and were trying to eat bread having its best time behind it. Although it was a giant and organized group, most of the people had just joined because they had nothing to eat and because they needed someone to follow.
He didn't notice how they reached a tent being much bigger than the other ones. When they came in they saw a man sitting on something like a throne, but with an armor and a sword in his hand.
The leader of the group capturing them began to speak.
“We found this men in the forest, it doesn't seem as if they carry something valuable.”
With a gesture the man on the throne told him to go away.
He sized Cen and Marc up.
“What are you doing alone in the wilderness in a time like this? And whom are you leaned towards?”
Cen sighed. Everywhere he heard the same question. Sometimes he wondered whether there was a real difference between the army, the rebels and the bandits. Well, all of them were humans in the same time. Just the fate made them acting different.
“We are leaned towards nobody but to ourselves. However we are hating the emperor for killing everything we had and are now trying to kill him. I know that you are working together with the army, but I want to offer you a deal.”
The men said nothing but motioned Cen to go on.
“At the moment you are just marauding over the country and killing innocent villagers for robbing the few things they have. Besides the fact that this is cruel and inhuman, you hardly get enough food to feed your followers and in the near future you won't have any people to rob anymore because you and the army are killing everyone.
However there is a way being better for everyone. While the villagers have only the things they need for living, the emperor has tonnes over tonnes of gold and treasures in his palace. Killing him and taking over the realm will give you and your fellows enough money for the rest of your live.”
The man was obviously thinking about that possibility, but seemed uncertain.
“Why should I do something risky like that? If we fail, we will all die. Or something worse will happen.”
“Because you can't go on like this forever. What will you do after killing everyone? But if you kill the emperor...”
“Well, I will think about that. Until then you can stay in the camp. But just under arrest.”
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just a little update, but after this I will again make a part with the other chars, so I post it to make it complete.
Btw: I furst had this in the post before, but i edited it many times, so people might not have noticed. I'm very fast atm. Hope the quality isn't suffering.
enjoy!

The campfire was alone in the dark. The flames were going up and down and asked themselves: “What for?”
Two human shadows were thrown on the wall. It seemed as if they were arguing.
Cen and Marc were standing between the wall and the fire. Cen was very angry while Marc had a dismissive and rigid expression on his face.
“And I say to you, I won't help these bandits to overthrow the emperor. Its obvious what would happen then.”
“But its our only chance to kill him, to take revenge.”
“How can you say that there is no other chance if you never tried it out?”
Cen shook his head.
“Does it really matter how we kill the emperor? The main thing is that we kill him.”
“For us it doesn't matter, but for many others it does. Imagine what happens to this realm when the bandit-leader becomes the new emperor.”
“We will be dead then. You can't hope to stay alive. The vengeance will be the last thing we will achieve.”
“I don't hope. I don't even dream of it. But I can't leave all the other people with a new emperor.”
“Why should we care about what happens after us? We won't be a part of it.”
“Because the world just doesn't work with an attitude like that. With everyone being just focused on his own welfare. And because thinking like this causes fates like our own one. Destroyed families, destroyed lives. Would you want anyone to go through the same pain like you did?”
“No, I don't. But I lost the belief in the good in man. Look around you. People like me and you are murdering their brothers. There aren't only a few evil persons. A normal man kills without reason. Why should I help them?”
“Because not people like you and me are murdering, but murdering people are people like you and me. They are still normal villagers, hating themselves for what they are doing, hoping to live a normal life again, but seeing no other escape out of hunger and death. So they follow someone who seems to know what he does. Because they have no hope. And if you are really thinking of them as monsters, aren't you one of them, too?”
Cen wasn't convinced, but he didn't know anything to reply, either.
“I can't force you to change your opinion, but I won't support this madness. Do what you want, I will try to rescue the rebels. Good luck.”
With this words he ran into the shadow of the night. After a few seconds Cen couldn't see him anymore. On the wall there was just one shape left. A hand covered its face and it slowly sank to the ground. Very small shadows fell down. Cen was crying.
Marc was crying, too. However he hadn't time for it right then. He slowly sneaked out of the camp. There. A guard. Fortunately he hadn't seen them. Carefully he sneaked nearer and nearer. A fast hit on the back of the head and the man sank to the ground. Mumbling a low “sorry” he ran out of the camp and merged with the darkness.
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I'm back again, but with a problem. I made the story too long and now I don't have anything the characters could talk about. We had cruelty, loss, living with your past, fighting for other people, sense of dying for them... I don't know any other topic. Just one for the epilogue...
Thats why this story won't become much longer. I recognize how my chapters become shorter, I don't have much to write about anymore.
I hope that this doesn't mean that it becomes worse( if it does now, tell me. Maybe today is just a bad day. I will try to overwrite it then. I don't want this story to become bad because i didn't know what to write in the end :D), hope you will
Enjoy!
Btw: Comment! even if its bad, then tell me.

Why not look through your fingers what they've done.

The sun went down beyond the hills. The last beams were lighting up a group of persons sitting on a field. Then also they vanished and the landscape became dark. The group seemed to be alone, there weren't even the sounds of animals, but they knew that all around them the army was lying, observing them, ready to kill everyone trying to escape.
They knew that there wasn't any hope.
Fred looked around. Many of the rebels weren't even adults. Fear showed in their eyes and they were crying. Nobody wanted to imagine what would happen to all of them. This was different from the fear of dying in a fight. They were waiting for the inevitable death, helpless.
One of the young men near to him raised his voice over the other ones.
“Why did we try to fight against the emperor? Why? Couldn't we be satisfied with our live? Now we will all die. And what for? What for?”
Many of the others nodded in approval. Fred couldn't believe it.
“What for? Why? Maybe because of all the injustice and cruelty committed by the army? Maybe for all the ones suffering from the pain it brought over the land?”
“But what did it change? We will be dead and the cruelty will live on.”
Fred became more and more angry.
“How can you know what will happen before it did? You can't. If you lost all your hope, why don't you just go and kill yourself? Everything you do can somehow lead to your death. But it isn't said that this will.”
“Now please be honest this one time. We will die, and you know it.”
“No, I don't. And maybe we changed something with our acting, we probably won't find out.”
“Maybe we changed something. Why should I care whether we did or not? It doesn't help me anymore. I am dead and you are, too. Why should it matter for us what happens afterwards?”
Before Fred could reply anything, Z stood up and looked the man straight in the eye.
“Would you want to live in a world where everyone is just focused on his own welfare? Where nobody is helping you when you have troubles? Where nobody cares whether you die or not? Would you?”
He turned around and left the others arguing, going a bit further into the darkness. Just not too far, otherwise he would be killed. But does it matter much anyway? He won't live on for a long time and he wasn't sure if that was good or bad. Maybe the death was the salvation he waited for, no searching anymore, no uncertainty...

Just a few meters away, Drahcir and Mailliw were sitting in the darkness, watching the camp.
“Look in their faces, how they are crying. They just don't deserve a death like that. I can't believe that we aren't helping them.”
Drahcir was sitting next to him and seemed to be buried in thoughts.
“I wish we could help them, too. But we can't. We have to leave them to their fate.”
“How can you be that sure? How can you be that heartless? They are dying a painful death and we don't even try to do something against it.”
“We have nearly no chance to help them. But we have a mission to fulfill and I won't forget that.”
“A mission! We are talking about lives! Lives that are dying.”
“I know. But it doesn't help to talk about it over and over again. You just have to accept what is happening and try to change what is possible. Dying for them doesn't help them.”
“But...”
“I'm sorry, but it is just like that. I would be really happy if I could change that, but I can't.”
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woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooow...
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Dude u should make this story downloadable...I am so far behind. :P

PDF? Word Doc?
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i would highly recommend pdf.. i can make one for you if you want.
here you see the two pdfs i made
http://www.lf-empire.de/lfev9/en/lf2-emp...rt/stories
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should totally allow people to be all trolley on their birthday :D
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Freakishly awesome, but I would like to be a person who almost never gets angry, except when...... yeah you guessed it..... friends are hurt..
If at first you don't succeed, you're probably not going skydiving again.
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guess that means it hasn't become too bad in my last post? thats good.
Yeah, would be nice if you could make a PDF out of it as soon as it is finished. Don't know whether I have the programm for it. Probably not :D
Next part will probably come tomorrow.
@Zabubola: Will you go on with your hunters story? I want to know what will happen.
@sadbahv: now its too late to change :D
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