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LF2 Destruction of Evil
#1
Well,this is my first story.Hope you will like it.Comments are totally welcome.
LF2-Destruction of Evil
Chapter 1 (Click to View)
Chapter 2 (Click to View)
Chapter 3 (Click to View)
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#2
woah intro sounds like a movie trailer xD
nice =D
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#3
nice plot, but it needs more description for julian and stuff
i.e. intro needs an introducton
and when the heroes are called little fighters its sounds weird..
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#4
Well,thanks for your comments.
@Qwertz-OK,little fighters changed to only fighters.
Chapter 1
Julian's evil deeds were continuously becoming true.One by one,he took over a place and he made all the residents his slaves.
There was a village named Reyer.In that village,lived Davis.He was a fighter who trained hard to protect his village from Julian's army along with his friend,Woody who also helped him do this.The village was ,infact,one of the only places in the world that Julian's army failed to capture.
Julian was becoming more and more frustrated when he could not capture Reyer.He ordered Bat,who was one of his most powerful soldiers to take an army to capture Reyer and bring Davis and Woody to him.That night Bat gathered his army to capture Reyer.They decided to attack at night so that the village people would find it harder to see them and it required to be night so that Bat could use a technique to bring Davis and Woody more quickly.At the stroke of midnight,Bat's army attacked from all sides.The village people were taken by surprise and were unable to stand against them.But,they did not give up.They fought to protect the village.Davis and Woody fought very bravely and they finally found Bat.
"Bat!"said Davis,charging to attack him."This will be over,here and now.I'll use my portal to send you to Julian and he'll deal with you."Bat said and then suddenly,he used his powers to make some kind of warp portal.It was pulling everything towards it.Davis somehow managed to get a hold of a tree.Woody grabbed Davis' leg.Frustrated to see this,Bat used more power in the warp portal.With the power increased,the pull also increased.Davis lost his grip and both of them were pulled inside the warp portal.But Bat lost control of the portal but he managed to pull Davis and Woody inside the portal.His army managed to capture Reyer.Bat thought that everything was done,the village is captured and Davis and Woody are dealing with Julian at that time.But,he was wrong.When he lost control,both of them were warped into some other place.But he did not know that.
Davis and Woody woke up and they found that they were in some forest.Woody saw a board and he read it,"Lion Forest."

To be continued...
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#5
the beginning sounded like asterix and obelix vs caesar xD
and add that to ur 1st post so its easier to see if u did anything or not when ur thread reaches side 2 it will be hard for the readers
Say Anything - Alive with the glory of love

My first char: a rudolf mod <--- waiting for comments

LF story reasonable beginning <--clicky (Dont u dare not to leave a comment!)
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#6
@LSwarley-Done.
I have never seen asterix and obelix vs caeser(whatever you said) so I don't know what it sounded like.
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thats just a comic from my childhood xD the klischee was that the romans conquer gaul and 1 village succesfully resist with because of 2 ppl and their magical potion and caesar got mad cause only 1 village could resist his army.

the part with the potion isnt right but the rest matched and i loved the comic =p
Say Anything - Alive with the glory of love

My first char: a rudolf mod <--- waiting for comments

LF story reasonable beginning <--clicky (Dont u dare not to leave a comment!)
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#8
So,it's a comic.What a coincidence.I thought of the 1st Chapter something like that.
Anyway,2nd Chapter will be coming up soon.I am getting some kind of an idea.I'll have to think more about it.
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#9
actually i like the cartoon of it much more xD

well what about let them be at a place where they get distracted by (just the first thing that popped up in my mind)
something that they desired and then anyhow escape with much more confidence or determination =p

E:just realized my idea and it rlly happened in the cartoon -.- childhood still have influence on me
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My first char: a rudolf mod <--- waiting for comments

LF story reasonable beginning <--clicky (Dont u dare not to leave a comment!)
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Well,I am thinking of putting Deep and Henry in the next chapter.
And some..................................
Hey!I won't reveal the whole thing!Some information,alright.Wait for the chapter.
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