LF2 Destruction of Evil

[LSwarley]

And another clichee idea popped up xD : hunter+lumberjack in a forest
hmm.. nice one but i think it too short for a chapter =/ more like a good night story or still the introduction dunno but i feel like somethings missing ^^ mayb details but cant think of any since uve started like this detailed fighting scenes?

E: and could u please take a look at my thread? i want an opinion from u =p

[nehalbordoloi]

@LSwarley-Okay,I'll look into your story and give my opinions.
Okay,Chapter 2.
Chapter 2
Davis and Woody are confused when they see this.They had never heard of this place.They realized that Bat had teleported them to some other place.Suddenly,arrows came down from the sky and many men surrounded them.Davis and Woody tried to fight them,but they could not.They captured them and were brought to two men.
Davis thought "These must be their leaders."
"Who are you?Julian's minions?"one of them said,pointing his sword towards them.
"Are you trying to capture us?"said the other.
Then Woody said,"Hey.....I know that voice....is that you,Henry?"asked Woody.
Henry said,"How do you know my name?"
Woody said,"Its me,Woody."
"What??"said Henry.
Henry said to the other person that they were his friends.Believing him,he let them go.
Then Henry introduced themselves to Davis and Woody,his name was Henry and the other persons name was Deep.
Davis asked Woody how he knew Henry.He said that Henry was a childhood friend of his.He was captured by Julian and was taken away.Henry told them"We are rebels who are rebelling against Julian.Will you help us?""Sure."both of them said.
Unknowingly to them,a spy of Julian was watching them and after hearing everything,he went back to Julian and told him.
When Julian got to know of this,he ordered some of his soldiers to burn down their entire camp.At night,the soldiers quietly went up to the camp and started a fire.Soon the entire camp started to burn,and without leaving any exit.
When the fighters got to know of this,Deep ordered his men to bring water.But,that was not the only problem.Many soldiers started attacking them,killing everyone one by one.A furious fight began.Everyone was fighting for their lives and for the sake of others.
Davis,however,was in a different place.Before the fire started,he went to the forest as he could not sleep.There he found a temple,half destroyed and looked very old.Davis went inside and he found some inscriptions on the side of a wall.He read quietly,"Water will extinguish fire that burn up the evil heart."Suddenly,a beam of light came down from sky in front of the statue of the Water God.
Soon,a huge,manly figure was standing before Davis.He said,"I have been waiting for you.The flames in Julian's heart are getting more and more bigger.Take this,the Water Dagger.This is the weapon that will destroy Julian..."
He handed Davis the Dagger and before Davis could ask about anything,he vanished.
Confused,Davis went out of the temple and then he saw smoke coming from the place of the camp.He rushed there and then he saw the fire.Then he thought,''Water can extinguish fire....so...."
He put the Dagger inside the ground and at once,huge waves of water came from all sides.Leaving him,his friends and their army,everything was swept away.
All of them came back together and Woody asked Davis,"How did you do that?"
Davis said,"It's classified."
Then Henry said,"I have a friend,John,he knows a lot about Julian's weaknesses.Unfortunately,he's held captive by Julian."
"Then,we will have to fight to get him free,won't we?"said Woody.
"OK then we go tomorrow,at the crack of dawn"said Deep.

to be continued..

[LSwarley]

Kinda confusing, but the effect is i wait up for the next part =p
done on purpose?

Eome grammar from me changed xD

[nehalbordoloi]

Chapter 3
At night,the 4 fighters came together to make a plan.
Henry said,"John is held captive at the Central part of the Meriyer Valley.The security is very tight as Julian does not want anyone to know about his disadvantages.We'll have to think very hard to make a successful rescue."
Deep said,"Why don't we just attack head on?"
Woody said,"Attacking head on will result in a defeat.Julian's army is very strong,we won't be able to defeat them.I have a plan.We'll use the proverb,'Tit for tat'.
Woody then told everyone the plan he had in mind.Everyone agreed at the plan.
At dawn,they gathered their troops and went to Meriyer Valley.When they had sight of the Central part,Woody went ahead and the rest stayed there.Woody quietly went up to the guards without being seen.And took them out one by one.After all the gate guards
were taken out,their troops marched forward.Then,all the 4 fighters used the same technique which their enemies used.They set fire to the entire part.The enemy troops were in a state of panic.Then the troops of the 4 fighters started attacking the troops.Then,using this time to their advantage they rushed to the place where John was held captive.When they entered the place,Davis and Woody saw someone they knew.It was Bat.He was as though waiting for them.
Bat said,"I knew you would be coming here.Taking the help of John to get to know about Julian's weaknesses."
Henry asked Davis,"Who is this guy?"
Davis said,"He is one of Julian's minions.He's quite powerful.Don't underestimate him."
Bat said,"This time,I'll you all to Julian for sure."
Then Bat again used his powers to open the warp portal.Everything started to be pulled towards it.
Woody said,"Unfortunately for you Bat,I got to know your weakness in this warp portal."
Then he said to Henry,"Henry,shoot as many arrows you can at the warp portal."
Henry started shooting arrows towards the warp portal.When the arrows started entering the portal,it started overloading.The portal blew up and Bat was blasted towards the wall and he fell down,unconscious.Then the 4 fighters quickly went up to John,freed him,took their troops and left.After they reached their camp,the 4 fighters joined together for some discussion.
John said,"Julian's only weakness is to defeat him by using the 10 fighters.He will become immortal not much time from now.We will need to defeat him before that happens.I had found a map in which all the locations of the 10 fighters are marked."
Davis said,"Where will we go first?"
John said,"First stop,Queen's Island,where we will find Firen and Freeze."

to be continued...


It may take a while for the next chapter because I will not be able to be online.