The Secrets of the shadow Battles.

[Ascor]

yeah i have prewriting all
but i don't want to release chapters over a long time period
and so they'll get shorter
because i don't want that the patiently of the reader isnt there anymore if i wont release chapters

[Zabobula]

Sometimes a long time period is a good thing. Not overly long time periods like a month or so. Taking time to work on a chapter will improve the quality of it greatly.

[Ascor]

Suddenly they heard guigs spurgeling. (dunno if you're writing it so).
"Hey commander guigs"
"Thanks god. You're guys appeared in the right moment", guigs said, speakin very hardly.
Suddenly they noticed a men in the shadows.
"Hey! Don't hide they're! Come out and fight like a men", kenzo shouted.
"It's not a men", zab said.
"What?"


At the castle of the empire Razen stood on top of the wall, looking at his army.
The air was full of smoke. Soldiers shouted in murderus pain. Hundreds of people we're dying in one minute. And Razen had calculated that all.
Nothing could go wrong.
But suddenly somebody jumped in front of him.
It was just an simple soldiers so he punched him down the wall, sending a palm after him.
He heard something hitting the ground.
<That was just a weak moment>, Razen thought.
<Nothing is going to go wrong>
"Lord Razen, they're comming from the east wall", a soldier shouted very injured as Razen jumped down the wall.
<That guy is almost dead. If i kill him he will no longer have that pain>
Razen sended a strong palm to him and the guy was pressed in the ground.
Really nothing could go wrong.
Razen expected them to come from the eastside because there was his weak spot.
Ryuzoko, a huge man, walked in front of Razen.
"Razen! That's not good thousands of soldiers are killed already. Stop that", Ryuzoko said.
Razen looked at the ground and saw half his army lying down to his feets.
<Nothing is going to go wrong... if i'm able to eliminate every potential enemy>, razen thought killing ryuzoko with a knife.
"Why razen?"
"Cause your dead is just for a higher idol"

[Bamboori]

after a long time you posted a new chapter! :P
but it was worth it.

only thing i have to complain about:
-it sounds like the reader missed something
-i already got killed! X/

[Ascor]

“They’re coming”, razen said.

Razen just jumped on the wall and the battle started.
it is supossed that the reader can think what happened.
And you're a potential enemy (btw: never thought that razen is so cruel)
just posted to keep you reading

[Evil Sonidow]

Who's the idol?

[Ascor]

First of all the "Idol" is a plan of razen.
and i we're really dumb to say you what it is

[sadbhav]

well cool, but a lil' confusing.
I Dunno but you seem to potray MH as....evil? XD

[Ascor]

Well maybe

someone will be illloyal to mh and the group will found him
but i have some school tests so don't be disappointed if theres no chapter

[Ascor]

Seems like i have to write something.
Now i got holidays so wait for a chapter (with snow [Yes that HAS to be])
and team shadow will only require 3 members...
at the chapter i posted at 25-11-2008 05:54 PM
so let yourself surprising
I'm gonna write something now