The Secrets of the shadow Battles.

[sadbhav]

Sometimes I love surprises, this is one of those other times..

[The Lost Global Mod]

so time to get an more detailed statement:
your story has potential... things i would improve though:
make the chapters a bit longer, they are just to short.
let it have more depth, i hope you know what i mean.
other than that.. quite good. do you still write on it?

[Ascor]

yeah i do
i had several chapter but i trashed them then i had another trie and trashed it too.
soon i'll post another chapter.
Lemme check what it's about...
about a new character

[Ascor]

omfg
i need to get the whole story in one paper
because i dunno if the new chapter fits
and i have to write something about km etc

super uber collapses

[Ascor]

Yo guys
another day another chapter

Comments welcome


"Now, that i won and i'll kill you, you can say me what you wanted from me," mailliw said.
"What are you doing all day?"
"Who cares,"mailliw answered
"I care."
"why?"
"i wanna recrute you..."
"For what?"
mailliw was surprised
"an operation which may lead to death so i need the best figthers i can get."
"I'm just a fool from an tiny village"
"Time to change that..."

Kenzo and Blade were waiting for zab to wake up.
"So what is our mission about?" kenzo asked.
"Finding a Traitor." Di-Blade had said this word crimson.
"Why is this man a traitor?"
"Once a day there was a war,... like this one we stand right before," blade explained, "and everyone was in rumors because there were several attacks on King Razen"
Blade sighed.

In this one night the wind blewed strong and the rain made a crackling noise on the walls of the castle.
Some mens were sneaking up on the guards. One of the guards sighed, "Damnit rain"
Then someone behind him said, "it makes sneaking a lot easier." The guard felt cold wet steal on his throat.
Then the ground was blotted with blood.
The assasin pulled his cowl deeper in his face.
"Why have you did that? The only one we should kill is razen! Imagine someone finds him now!"
"Narf, just leave me my fun" the men said cleanin up his preciscious weapon.
It was a hoe.

Later on this night there were great rumors
11 Soldiers and nearly 3 wizzards were killed.
4 Assasins were caught.
One of them escaped.
Some of the people say he's still there outside the range of razen.
Waiting for another war... waiting for another chance.


In a small town, there was a boy walking down the dry street.
He tripped... but there was nothing to trip.
someone used magic.
His mouth was dry and full of sand.
"Bastard," he wispered.
"Ah, Take a look who is there on the ground... Our old friend," a boy who was definitely the leader of this street gang said.
"One more time... i won't join you"
"we can change that."
After a few seconds the fight was over.
The member of the gang were all on the ground and the boy had several scarfs now.
"No... you can't."

[Reaper]

a bit late, but I just read through the whole story and was wondering why nobody is commenting this although it is one of the best parts of it.
It is sometimes a bit confusing how you talk about something and then let it fall down, but it keeps me interested because i have to use my brain
But its a very good chapter, my ones aren't better... It isn't as long as my ones, but I don't have time to read so much, so its good. And its much funnier...

One of the guards sighed, "Damnit rain"
Then someone behind him said, "it makes sneaking a lot easier." The guard felt cold wet steal on his throat.

Hope you are still working on it. I would love to see how it will go on. But don't make it faster because I am waiting for it. Try to keep the quality of the last chapter and it will be very good.

[Ascor]

somehow
i am ehr how should i say it.
I am currently busy with building the whole story up.
Every story needs a BASE.
A solid base
Like an war
and something else
and a camp with people who are captured
and something else
and this small town
and this and that and all those things
and i am currently building those things in my mind and in my story

so let yourself surprise

(someone realises that two people in this story are the same [tipp: Flashback])

[The Lost Global Mod]

wow.. thats a nice chapter.. i wouldn't say complettly but.. still different compared to the other chapters..
continue like that.. i like it that way more

[Sharkitoon]

Hiyaa, i'm new here and was quite surprised at how things seems to be,
1)Your story is WAAAAY so good that i wish you publish that story,
2)your story have to much events going on that it's confusing but something in your story makes me more and more attracted to read the whole chapter.
3)It will be fun if there's a mod with this story, is the kenzo in your sig refers to the kenzo in the story?
4)You really inspired me to write a story, right now i'll start with a draft at home first.It's title will be

" Destiny Crisis "
"No one can change their destiny..."

[Ascor]

1.1 Congratz and welcome!
1.2 Publish it where?
2. Read above.
3. Yes it's the same kenzo but i have no time to do a mod currently
hope you understand that.
4. Hope it will be good and if you need help i'll help you.




Edit:
OMFG i don't think it has the potential to be a ... real book.
If i would do so then i would have to overwork some things really.