my first face attempt

[Yaff]

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[Reaper]

It looks like an interesting concept, but the face itself seems rather strange.
First of all, it's a normal human face on template's body. Even if that's intended, it's not a good idea to mix two styles (yours and the original LF2/template one). Secondly, his hair could need some work. Usually, LF2-chars have rather spickey hair. Even if you don't seek for that, you shouldn't only shade the hair as a whole, but the single wisps. Looking at a original char might help you with that. His eye looks rather manga-styled. I don't know if that's intended, but if it isn't: Comparison to an original face might help again.
Other than that: His nose could be a bit more visible, try to make the shading of it stronger.
Last but not least, if you want to do an LF2-styled face, you should add black outlines to it. If you don't, there's nothing else to complain about.

I know, that has been quite a lot of critique points, but don't let me demotivate you. I personally consider face-pics to be the hardest part of a character (and I ain't good in doing them), but you'll get better the more you practice.

[SirisRhazael]

Look here:

Noticed the black lines?
Your face pic doesn't have them.
It also lacks a little blurr. But if it's your first attempt, the next one may be good

[Yaff]

Reaper the thing you said about the template body, its just like that because its not done yet. The eys are like that and i want it like that. I will add the outlines.