Fairy Globe #1 - Roar Of Fire

[Sharkitoon]

Chapter One (Click to View)

Chapter One

Pandora Forest.Moonlight filtering through the top branches of fresh-looking trees, and gentle breeze that leave the trees swaying calmly, not a single sound except for the gentle sounds of footsteps.Two tiny fairies, blue hair, pointed ears,and smooth fade blue skin, stepping on woods gently.

" Narla! " pointing upwards, the fairy with soft blue hair nudged the other fairy, " Look at the moon, it's really bright! "

The other fairy, Narla, with spiky blue hair, watch the moon with a wide smile.
" It's really nice, " She said " isn't it? "
" yes, it is " The other fairy replied, while his gaze still stay fixed on the bright moon. " I wish everyone can look at the moon the way we does and just stop hating the other race... " Narla said weakly, " Do you wish the same, Kain? "

" yea, but that's just how this world is, Narla " Kain sighed " The dragon race will never understand how we- "

" Shhh... " Narla shush him. " Listen. "

A deep growl echoes from the heart of the forest, " dragons? " Kain ask in a low voice, " In the heart of the forest? I don't think so " Narla whispered.
Both of them quietly move nearer to the source of the sound, carefully while keeping themselves low.The sound of rough breathing become louder as
they crouch walk nearer.Narla brace herself for the creature they're about to face, While Kain , drenched in sweats, stay closely behind Narla, who is
also vigorously sweating.Narla took a deep breath before she take a look at the creature...

" Oh God "

In between the trees, A fearsome creature with glittering scales, giant wings, and a phenomenal fiery breath stood there.

A dragon.

To be continued...

[oliveryungo]

A piece of advice- don't have so many stories at once. Always complete one and then work on another one. It's easier that way.
On the story itself:
Your tense is really starting to confuse me.
It looks quite interesting, though. Fairly good tension.

[Sharkitoon]

Yea, well, this is a story I'm working on when i have a free time at school. But ' Into The New World ' is a story i work on at home or library.
Yea I'm really bad at tense and grammar.Sorry bout that
I'm trying to learn that in school

[Marshall]

No build up of suspense.
I read it, waiting for something to happen perhaps in a more gradual manner, so when suddenly the dragon appeared it does not feel climatic at all.

[Sharkitoon]

Yea i acknowledged that when i was writing it.
It wasn't rushed but I have no idea of the suspense.
And i know i lack of details.

(^_^)