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Now, that's a good length for a chapter. Proper use of descriptions this time as well.
There are some grammar errors and a few little things that don't feel quite right, but that is mostly a matter of practice. Apart from that, I find it easier to lean back and imagine the scene ( maybe even from various character's perspectives) before I start writing. It helps me to get the right feeling into the story. Well, everyone has his own approach to it.
You may always argue wether the plot of a young guy having to defeat the evil demon is original, but there are various reasons why it's so popular and why it is valid to write another of those stories. Even if you leave out that fact that the basic plot doesn't determine the whole story :P
I have to say, I didn't expect that fast improvements. Well done.
There are some grammar errors and a few little things that don't feel quite right, but that is mostly a matter of practice. Apart from that, I find it easier to lean back and imagine the scene ( maybe even from various character's perspectives) before I start writing. It helps me to get the right feeling into the story. Well, everyone has his own approach to it.
You may always argue wether the plot of a young guy having to defeat the evil demon is original, but there are various reasons why it's so popular and why it is valid to write another of those stories. Even if you leave out that fact that the basic plot doesn't determine the whole story :P
I have to say, I didn't expect that fast improvements. Well done.