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unnamed prologue
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Me likes. A very nice choice of words and some nice figures of speech that help us to get into the story. It also is good to have a bit of an unusual perspective which befits the bizarre situation of waking up in a coffin quite well. (a situation out of which you might have been able to make even more, though. Give us the chance to play with it in our minds. A man finding himself in a coffin in a cathedral with lots of black-dressed people around him. The whole scene, the faces...)
There is not much happening here, but then again that is fine for the beginning of a story.
I still demand a continuation. Now you only made me more curious about the backstory. Don't let me rush you, though.
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unnamed prologue - by dubbleD - 07-06-2010, 01:14 PM
RE: unnamed story - by oliveryungo - 07-06-2010, 01:41 PM
RE: unnamed story - by dubbleD - 07-06-2010, 01:45 PM
RE: unnamed story - by oliveryungo - 07-21-2010, 09:42 AM
RE: unnamed story - by Reaper - 07-22-2010, 12:06 PM
RE: unnamed story - by dubbleD - 03-23-2011, 11:57 AM
RE: unnamed prologue - by Reaper - 03-26-2011, 07:54 PM



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