Macrome the Gremlin

[Reaper]

Guess LF2-hacker is kinda answering to this:

I want to work on LutiChris char and work on this Story...

Anyway, I quite like your story, its interesting to read because you have no idea how it will go on. On the other hand that makes it hard to give you ideas for how its going on as I think you probably have a general idea of why it is happening, what Julian wants, what Macrome does...
And I also like things like this in a story:

“sh*t!” Dennis was suddenly airborne high in the sky just like when he falling f a l l i n g… - oh no, it was happening again.

There are some minor mistakes, especially with... how are they called? Don't even know the german name... conjunctors?
what I mean is things like:

And as soon as he was quick he was never the less right.

That means: When he became quick, he was right. But you probably mean "although". He was quick, but that didn't help him to escape. Oh, and its nevertheless.
Well, that isn't that important, if you only make some minor mistakes( which is the case) we normally won't have a problem to follow.
Like just_a_phil said, chapters are a bit too short, but as some people might not want to read extra long chapters I guess its ok.
So keep on working and improving. Its a good start up to now.