unnamed prologue

[oliveryungo]

Ergh....I think that you should upload seperate versions of your story, so critics can compare. No one can remember what you wrote before, unless there was a really short time gap.
Anyway, it looks as if you've fiddled with your story a bit, because I can spot more mistakes XD. Or is it just me? I dunno.
a) You haven't fixed the thingies I mentioned in previous post.

Mistakos-
"watching the mourners beginning to move in anticipation." - Sounds like the mourners are anticipating, not Jhin.
"balancing perfectly on the beam was on" - Blah. In fact, I'll ignore typos and grammar for the sake of keeping this short.
"“shh” shushed Clark" - Not neccessary, is it?
"ignoring Jhin completely" - If he's ignoring him then he wouldn't be saying anything.
Blah. End of review.