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[Evil Sonidow]

The main problem is that you all fail to respect hierarchy. Julian is A LOT stronger than Z is. He MUST respect him or DIE. Worse part is that Julian gives the impression to be a pussy because he lets subordinates treat him like that.

Also, a message for Pi-face and Zab: STOP MAKING YOUR CHARS OVERLY POWERFUL. It's ridiculous.

I think you're reading too deeply into my posts. :P

Just because my character doesn't respect Julian doesn't mean he's stronger than him. My character has his own agenda and doesn't like taking orders from anyone else. It's obvious a deal was made. But what it consisted of is a mystery as of now.

Not too deeply. Anyone with average reading skills will notice that it looks disrespectful.
Also, not like your mystery is thrilling at the moment. I don't see any reason to see to it.

- the map we have of our map is just a part of it, the part we now. Around it there could be other things.
- the army should soon come which could change some things and gives us new material

I agree with this completely.

- Zab is either strong because he has the ring of a warlord or because the evil ghost is in his head. So he has some conflicts which make it ok that he is strong and he is evil which makes it also ok. I guess we need an enemy as strong as that, otherwise its too easy. as long as Manji is completely good, he shouldn't be able to defeat a warlord, even with the help of Noir. But for now its ok.

As said before, nobody can defeat a warlord through normal means. That means NOBODY. So Drahcir? You left a plothole. Good for us~

1anwser: Well I hope we can expend the map 5X bigger because it's so small, for me.

Don't see a problem.

2anwser: Yeah, the army could give as new material but don't think that much.

It's an army with greater intelligence and equipment. They can give us some fair improvement in terms of material.

4anwser: Why dose every main char in this story has to be a fighter, look I'm gonna replace me with Manji, and I'm not that much of a fighter.

I pointed out when we started that if we had a diversificated group it'd be more fun, because we could complement each others abilities, eg. warrior, wizard, ranger, rogue, cleric, etc. But everybody chose to go with melee and stuff like fire/ice. So much for creativity.

5anwser: Well I just suggest we could close it down while we discus this.

No.

Okay I will make me Elias or Pi-Face but his name will be Elias and he will represent me. He will from Earth and can he bring just one electronic a PSP okay that's all.
PSP, strands for PlayStation Portable.

We know what PSP is. And no.

"I guess Z is atm intoxicated by his own might." epic post. XD

Not.

She wears an intimidating lion’s mask passed down in her family. It is the mask that lets everyone know her title as the “Forest Guardian”. She has never taken it off because, in her family, there is a curse placed among the women. It is said that if someone were to gaze upon her eyes…a terrible fate would befall them.

Reminds me of Medusa.

A woman with power beyond the scope of warlords. There is no known extent to her power and she never uses it on her own. Only those who seek her out have the ability to use and control her power for their own ambition. She is a goddess who roams the earth and no one knows about her.

Change this to something else, because it's crappy (eufemism).

[Ascor]

*Lifts his arm*
Question!
Who or what is a "Warlord"?
May someone could give a wikipedia-like definition :P


psst...
http://dict.leo.org/?lp=ende&from=fx3&search=warlord
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Warlord
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=warlord ~ Blue Phoenix

[Lord Anu]

We can't have an all guy story. That's just wrong... :P

This is where I agree with Zab, good idea. Maybe Kira could be one of the new female characters(because we already described her as a skilled warrior)... But if we will use Kira in story don't make it that she cheat Anubis with somebody else(it could happened), because she is already close with Drahcir, Sonidow, Philus and Cen...(Zab made 3 new women so you guys have something to catch). Or maybe you guys are planing to write only about combat with showing no feelings between male and female characters(your choice).

-My computer will be repaired soon

[Evil Sonidow]

I have no intention of linking Sonidow to a female right now. This story is progressing too fast and with low quality. We must change that.

[Lord Anu]

I know that our story is going to fast with poor descriptions of the whole combat and feelings between characters. When we are fighting in combat, there are like thousands creatures fighting, but we are describing only how heroes fight because we are quick... Also we don't have much time to describe feelings between characters, they just talk and travel together(I tried to put Anubis, Drahcir, Alec and Harold in one tavern to improve their relationship and new kind of hanging out. I also tried to put Kira as Anubis's wife to show that we[even as a heroes] can love somebody the most on the whole world. We are only hanging out in combat and in traveling).
My suggestion is that we must slow down with writing. Even if somebody write something before you(no matter you can continue on his part), it happened to me so many times. The action is going to quickly... army of prince Noir already reached the Castle Firend and they are doing final battle with Julian and his servants. You can make that Julian and his servetants win and that the Noir with heroes and army pull back OR you can do that Noir with heroes(you guys) and army defeat Julian and that Julian then pull back to some other more deeper and darker place(if you choose the option 2. , that means I must improve our world-map).

[Zabobula]

In order to slow things down (action-wise) you need to be more DESCRIPTIVE...kinda like your epically long posts Anubis. xD

If you want to increase the quality/interest/anticipation/ everything else in this story. We need to write more. And I'm not saying like when me and Pi-Face were going back and forward. They were short posts and too quick (I apologize if screwed up anyone's post since we were going so fast)

@Es:
" Quote:A woman with power beyond the scope of warlords. There is no known extent to her power and she never uses it on her own. Only those who seek her out have the ability to use and control her power for their own ambition. She is a goddess who roams the earth and no one knows about her.

Change this to something else, because it's crappy (eufemism). "

Nope I'm keeping her. Unless you want a vote O_o.

@Anubis:
"Or maybe you guys are planing to write only about combat with showing no feelings between male and female characters(your choice)."

Well I just created 3 female characters so, in regards to my future posts, I highly doubt it.

[Evil Sonidow]

Nope I'm keeping her. Unless you want a vote O_o.

Well, do as you want. I'll just kill her off then. She's ridiculous. Someone more powerful than the warlords? Not so fast.

[Zabobula]

Nope I'm keeping her. Unless you want a vote O_o.

Well, do as you want. I'll just kill her off then. She's ridiculous. Someone more powerful than the warlords? Not so fast.

Is not like she's going to fight anyone...unless the wrong kind of 'someone' learns about her in the novel that is. (Not referring to me either...I'm a different kind of wrong )

[Evil Sonidow]

I suppose you're pretending of making her some goddess of advice or anything like that. Hmm....perhaps then.

[Elias]

Okay just made a girl and me.

Elias (Click to View)

Name: Elias (Me)
Age: 13
Outlooks:
Background story: Elias, a boy from planet Earth happens to go to another world where there is war. The only thing he remembers before coming here that he was out side. Only thing he has is his cloth and a strange bracelet on his hand. He finds it strange because he fells some strange energy flowing in it and some how it's connected to him. Also it's like a glowing stick that can glow for short amount of time and only visible at night but at day it looks normal but every night it glows.
Know associations: Sophie, but doesn't recognize her because that's her at the futer.
Special abilities: Uses opponents attack when is attacking and making that blow ten times stronger then the opponents, if the opponent was attacking without a power or a weapon. Generally dodges attacks because if he gets hit by one of them it could hurt him deadly.

Sophie (Click to View)

Name: Sophie
Age: 15
Outlooks:
Background story: Sophie, younger sister of Elias, but she is older than him because she came into this world from the futer. Some reason her hair color changed when she came to this world, and she got some strange mystical powers. She came here similar as Elias and she has no clue where she is, but she feals something strange about this land something dark and evil.
Know associations: Elias, but doesn't recognize him because she never saw him at age of 13 only when she was a baby.
Special abilities: Can heal people and can give them more strength. Also can control water and can take it away from humans and plants but doesn't know it.

Also I will make one more char and this is true I have a baby sister that her name is Sophie and she is only 1 year and 6 moths old.