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reaper Wrote:Any number of characters may appear in your story, but focus on one or just a few of them. What is the limit on "few of them"? Would 3 or 4 suffice or is that too much of a stretch?
I know you are looking for a background story "for a character" I just wanted to be clear on the number of characters i could "focus on" in one story.
Also one more question: The point of View
Can we use 3rd person instead of 1st person?
I'm pretty sure most of us think automatically we would have to write in 1st person since it's a background story for a character.
I tend to write better if it's done in 3rd person rather than the latter.
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(06-07-2013, 01:00 AM)LutiChris Wrote: reaper Wrote:Any number of characters may appear in your story, but focus on one or just a few of them. What is the limit on "few of them"? Would 3 or 4 suffice or is that too much of a stretch?
I know you are looking for a background story "for a character" I just wanted to be clear on the number of characters i could "focus on" in one story. I just want to stress this once more, the story should revolve around a single character or a very small group. If he/they, on his/their way of development encounter/s other characters, latter should play only a minor role. We just don't want you to go complete overkill and describe every single character in one story. If you think that one character grew up in a little group or something like that, then sure, you're free to add a few more guys. 3-4 is probably the above limit already.
(06-07-2013, 01:00 AM)LutiChris Wrote: Also one more question: The point of View
Can we use 3rd person instead of 1st person? I don't think that Reaper has specified any POV to be used. So yeah, whatever feels best to you. Technically, you can also write in second person but this might sound really awkward
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In a kingdom of might and magic, there lived two brothers, Firen and freeze. They were born to very powerful parents, their mother Freeza and father Inferno. Firen inherited the power of fire from his father and Freeze inherited the power of ice from his mother. They both were brought up in their paternal village, popularly known as Tai Home Village. They were grown in the reign of Julian, the evil king of demons, and so they naturally learned how to fight as they were frequently attacked by bandits led by some fierce masked demons.
Firen and Freeze's mana power were still in the mid level when they were teens. Their mother called a great wizard, John to enhance their power. John took both of them to Queen's Island for their training. He said to Firen,"Firen, feel the power of the volcanoes and make their power come from within your heart. Feel the power inside your body, make it come out. You must be the master of fire." His inspiring words made Firen practice day and night."Start working day and night like your brother to achieve your maximum power limit. Your will should be as hard ice." Freeze joined his brother in his daily practice sessions and started to work as hard as Firen did.
After five months of constant training, they both were delighted to show John their special moves. After the demonstration of their power, John said to them,"Good, but now its time for your final task, you two must do a fusion." Firen exclaimed,"What!!?" John replied,"Yes, you heard me right, you two must do a fusion but remember if anyone of you do a mistake, the result will be horrible." The next day they tried to fuse with each other but due to some mistake, they turned into a hilarious, fat person. When John saw the fusion, he was not able to stop his laughter. After many failure, Freeze said,"Let's never do this again! I am just sick of it." Saying this they both left for their home. They were excited about seeing their parents after such a long time but.......
When they returned to their village, the saw the whole village was almost destroyed. It was done by Julian with his demon army. A group of fighters was formed which was led by Davis, their childhood friend to avenge Julian for what he has done. Firen as well as Freeze joined them for the sake of their village. They all went to a journey of fighting through the Lion Forest, across the Great Wall, through the frightening Stanley Prison to Julian's Castle. When they reached Julian's Castle, most of them were badly hurt. When Firen and Freeze were severely injured, they took a dangerous decision of fusing with each other. They ran into each other and there was a big explosion of fire and ice. Firzen was born at that moment. But due to Julian's dark power, Firzen was unable to control himself and kept on hitting his own friends.
Sorry, my friends I just can't help it. I know not why is this happening to me but you must stop me. Do kill me if necessary.......sob....
Julian thought,"Thank the Demons, that I used my dark powers on him right before his fusion or else he would have been one of them, even more powerful than me."
From that day on Firzen became the right hand of Julian.
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I think I might have gone a little overboard with this but it was definitely worth it.
Have fun reading it.
Two clones protect their counterpart, Rudolf, from thieves and thugs all night long while he sleeps soundly. A silhouette lurks in the dark forest, causing mischief and trouble for mother nature to worry about. The clones are quick to notice the figure’s sly movement and welcome him with a handful of shurikens. The clones don't realize he is right behind them and casts an energy blast toward one of the clones. The clone dies and it's body fades into nothingness. The other clone recognizes the attack to be Justin's.
"Justin!" He called out.
"Shh- You wouldn't want to wake up your master," he whispered. The clone dismisses his comment and attempts to slaughter him with his katana.
Justin avoids the attack.
"Leave at once," the clone announced.
"Don't worry," He pulled out a red orb and ran away.
The red orb was one of Rudolf's items that he was carrying in a small bag to the next town over. He had orders from Rudolf that he shouldn’t leave his side but he couldn't simply let Justin steal that precious artifact. He had no time to tell Rudolf, he had to stop Justin. The clone followed him relentlessly. Justin was evasive in the face of danger but the clone was faster. The clone sprung onto Justin from behind and cut him down to the ground. Justin turned around but was unable to move because the sword was lodged around his neck.
"Alright, I'm sorry. I knew it was wrong of me to steal from-"
"Hand it over," demanded the clone.
Justin searched his pocket for the orb and tossed it in the air.
The clone loosened his grip to catch the orb but suddenly realized his mistake. Justin fired one more blast but the clone was quick to block the attack. Justin attempted to flee like a coward but the clone grabbed onto his collar and pulled him up by the neck. Justin tensed up ready for a beating when suddenly a wave of purple smoke took them both by surprise.
"Looks like dad's here," whispered Justin. "You're in a heap of trouble now."
From out of the smoke appeared none other than the infamous Julian.
"How many times have I told you not to go messing around with the hero's," he bellowed out loud.
"Father, I found the orb you asked me to find. He has it."
Julian radiated with steam. "Why you little!" But before he could take a swing at him the clone had transformed into Justin and threw him at Julian. Julian caught his son. The clone struck back but it was just an illusion. There he is again no- wait there ugh! It was really hard for him to tell. An echo of laughter mocked his attempts at getting it right.
I should be getting back to my master. This is way too dangerous for me to handle alone, he thought. No wait, that would only put him in even more danger. I need to get far away from Julian as possible, he transformed back to his normal state and ran. The voices and laughter pursued but he no longer saw them. Out of the bushes came a deafening roar. He was apprehended by a powerful light. The clone evaded Julian's attack. That soul punch would have taken him down without a doubt. Justin caught up to the scene. The clone had to get away so he cloned himself. Lucky enough, the clones did the same thing and a vicious cycle continued to produce fresh new clones which had the evil doers surrounded.
"Interesting," Julian remarked. All the clones attacked at once.
Julian put his hand on Justin and he was gone in a puff of smoke.
Soon after he did that he performed a devastating big bang on the majority of the clones. All but one stood overwhelmed by the sight of his raw power.
"You're unusual," Julian walked toward him in a slow manner, "Although you are a hero there is something about you that is not quite right," Julian knelt down. "You seek Power," the clone looked away. "Yeees, I can sense you are envious of my power. I can give you that power you seek," The clone was defiant.
"No! I'm just a clone. Kill me already!"
"What's this? You think you are no better than any of your friends?" the clone remained still, awaiting certain death. Julian got up and walked around him. "You have a great gift and you know how to use it wisely. Here's how it works," he whispered in his ear.
"I'll let you live if you do me a small favor. I'll go into detail later but the main thing to take away from this is I'll grant you the source of my power," The clone's eyes widened but then he remembered.
"I die in one hit," he muttered. "What's a clone like me got a chance with any of you?"
"This!" Julian presented a bottle of milk to the clone. "Drink this and you will gain equal health," the clone took the milk bottle.
"Join me in the search for power and together we will take down this pathetic kingdom!"
"What do I need to do?" asked the clone.
"Here's a list i've made of all the villagers in town" The clone scoured the list.
"B-but," he hesitated. "Rudolf's on the list."
"No No NO, you're not following my idea. Transform into each of the villagers including the little fighters and make an army for me," The clone looked down at the paper again, staring at his master's name for a brief moment. He smiled and transformed into Justin. "Why the hell not!" They had left the woods that night and morning soon followed. Rudolf had woken up from his slumber.
"Man, what a weird dream I just had," he checked his pocket for the red orb. It wasn't there. He looked up and noticed his two clones had disappeared. "Damn," he scratched his head. He got up and left the woods. He reached the entrance of the town and walked by some of the villagers. They seemed reluctant and avoided his very presence. He stopped, puzzled by their bad mood. Then suddenly a voiced emerged from the crowd.
"Hey, YOU!" It was his best friend, Deep! Coming to greet him or so it seemed. Deep was very angry and by the looks of things all signs pointed to him.
"WHAT ON EARTH IS THE MATTER WITH YOU?!" he pushed Rudolf away.
"Wait-what? What the hell? I was out of town."
"Cut the crap ninja boy! Why did you attack me last night?"
"Did you not hear me? I was out of town it was probably somebody else!"
"My eyes do not deceive me," he squinted his eyes deep into Rudolf's soul.
"Well-" Rudolf was feeling mighty uncomfortable as well as perplexed.
"Not only did you attack me but you attacked the rest of the villagers!" Rudolf quickly turned to look closely at each of the villager passing by.
They were badly bruised up and had bandages covering parts of their body. Neither one of them wanted to make full eye contact with him. Davis walked by and saw the two of them.
"HEY YOU!" he shouted. Rudolf rolled his eyes.
"Yeah Yeah I know what this is all about. You're both under the impression that I had something to do with last night's attack. Well, I'm sorry but I swear you have the wrong guy," he was about to walk away when Davis stopped him.
"Oh yeah! Well- I found this in my room," he shoved a shuriken near Rudolf's face.
Indeed, he was astounded at the discovery. This has to be mine, but how? he wondered.
One of the villager's came up to Davis, he recognized that she was a friend of Jan's but he hadn't known what her name was all this time.
"DAVIS! I can't find Jan anywhere!" she squealed.
"What?!"
She jumped about pointing to Rudolf. "IT WAS HIM! IT WAS HIM! IT WAS HIM!"
"RUUUUDDOOOLLLFFF!" Davis was pissed.
In these types of situations he would likely run from the problem but he bumped right into Mark.
"Yo got some serious explain'n to do, punk!" The boy's took him down to Stanley's Prison, where he was to await his trial.
meanwhile...
"Hahaha, you've done a marvelous job. If I had gone in there it wouldn't have been a pretty sight. But you managed to quietly take down my enemies," said Julian.
"Well- I didn't kill them. I just did as you instructed me to do. There was also one individual I could not manage to transform into."
"I see," he looked unimpressed and a bit disappointed. "But you did a fine job anyways."
"This cloning business takes time, how many bottles do you have?" inquired the clone.
"Plenty, get to work!" he shouted. "Oh and just in case you have any funny ideas about taking me down like you did the other day," He waved his hands around a pile of armor and a knight had risen up from the clutter. He then raised both of his hands away from each other and lifted all the other remaining armor into a row of standing statues surrounding all four corners of the room. They also blocked all the existing exits between the large pillars.
"Have fun," and with that he slammed the door behind him with the last remaining scraps of armor filling in the spot in front of the door.
It was night time again. And up in the kingdom strange things were happening. Louis and Henry were doing cartwheels around their instructor, Monk.
"Sir, we don't have time for this tomfoolery. Stop this at once and practice your lesson!" Louis stopped but Henry went around in circles around them. "Would you please be so kind as to leave this room! You are distracting his royal majesty."
"Please Monk, address me as Louis. We don't need to be all fancy around here," said Louis.
"Pardon me your grace but like i've already mentioned the time of the great fiend is approaching. We need to be better prepared around here and I suggest-"
"-we go out to eat!" interrupted Henry. Monk pushed Henry out of the room using his shaolin palm. "That's nothing I can do it faster!" shouted Henry across the room.
"My stance allows me to block incoming attacks and it's done the proper way," Monk protested.
"IT LOOKS LAAAAMME!" shouted Henry.
"Pay no heed, he's a disgrace to the kingdom. Running around with those awful bandits and hunters everywhere," he shook his head.
"Enough of that i'll show you what I can do!" Louis exclaimed. The floor shook a powerful shock wave of force from both directions and pushed Monk to the other side of the room next to Henry. Monk faintly cheered, "Nice one!" and collapsed on the floor in exhaustion.
"Yep, I'm just that awesome!" Louis chuckled.
Suddenly, the floor shook violently and both Henry and Louis were startled. A massive soul bomb was heading their way but it was easily avoided. Julian was in plain view.
"So we meet again?" announced Julian.
"Ha! Dude?! How many times do I have to defeat you?" Louis laughed, "You're just thirsty for more aren'tcha?"
"How dare you insult me! I came back because i'm certain this time you will LOSE!"
"Yeah well don't count on it, he's gotten better as time went by," said Henry.
"Fools! Don't expect i'll be that careless again," said Julian.
"Bring it on Buttercup!" Louis said.
"Yeah! We're ready for ya!" shouted Henry.
"THEN LET THE GAMES...BEGIN!" Julian immediately created a bunch of flying skulls. Both Henry and Louis run blindly toward certain doom. Monk finally wakes up after his short nap.
"I do say sir- AHHHH!!" Monk screamed and is hit multiple times in the face by the skulls. He is passed out once again. Henry fired a critical shot in Julian's direction. Julian stops and is on the move. Louis does his mighty thunder punch but ends up passing right through a mirror image of Julian. He is attacked violently by more skulls in the other direction but is quickly stopped by two of Henry's Dragon Palm attacks. Louis heads right over to Julian but quickly runs away from him because of his mighty explosion. That gives Henry enough time to pull out his flute and do a little tune. Julian is raped in mid-air by the music restraining his every movement as well.
"YOU ARE SO ANNOYING!" shouted Julian.
Julian ran after Henry who was taunting him, saying "You can't catch me!" Louis begins to follow Julian but he is too late to save his friend. Julian caught up to Henry and punched him right out of the room. Louis began to fire a round of kicks at Julian but was hit by his uppercut. Things were turning out pretty bad. Even though Julian was severely damaged both Louis and Henry were so weak. Louis thought it would be a good time to get rid of the armor.
"OH no you don't!" Julian took the red orb from his pocket and threw it as hard as he could at Louis. Louis was hit hard in the chest while he was transforming. The red orb was possessing him. He tried to fight it but with no avail, he went and fell asleep. Julian picked him up and carried him over his shoulder. Henry returned with some beer.
"Oh no! What have I done?" Henry panicked. Monk coughed and Henry was delighted that he was still alive.
"Where's Louis?" he inquired.
"Julian defeated him," Henry hesitantly explained.
"Oh dear! We should warn everybody. Assemble the team, call the guards! Julian is going crazy! And-" Monk quickly inhaled in his frantic excitement. "Oh my!"
"What is it master Monk?"
"Are you-"
"Yes?" asked Henry.
"Are you drunk?! You smell dreadful!"
meanwhile...
Rudolf passed back and forth inside his cell wondering how he was framed for last night's disturbance. He surely couldn't have sleepwalked. Maybe a bunch of bandits dressed up in bathrobes attacked everyone! But no that wouldn't work. They are too clumsy and stupid to pull something like that, he thought to himself.
"Guards! Guards!" Jack called out. He was breathless. "Julian has invaded the Castle-"
"Again?" one of the Knights complained.
"Yes, but this time he has taken Louis hostage!"
"But sir, what about the prisoner?"
"We need everyone's help."
"Let me out!" shouted Rudolf. The others turned to acknowledge his presence. "I want to help. Please, I was probably drunk. I'm sorry for what I did," pleaded Rudolf.
"You're not sorry enough besides I've never seen you drunk before and that was unforgivable! Look what you did to my hair!" And with that they left to search for Louis.
Back at the Forbidden Tower...
Being bad ain't so bad it's kind of fun actually. Many of the clones had been turned into a lot of the villagers, a few had stayed the same, while the rest were goofing off. The real Jan was tied up, having to watch them make fools of themselves. Two of the clones thought it would be funny if they impersonated people she knew.
“Why are you doing this to me? Ew, that’s disgusting!” she turned away from the two clones who were making out.
“Guy’s, come on! Cut that out,” said the clone. “You know how that makes me feel.”
“Ever since you opened our eyes to freedom and sin there is nothing more thrilling than to not take orders and just do whatever the hell we want,” the ninety-seventh clone stopped to drink some beer. “We are eternally grateful for that,” said the eighteenth clone.
“Yes, but for the time being try to restrain yourself from sexual practice,” both clones detached from one another and wrestled the group behind them, making fun of Monk and Mark.
Julian forced his way in thus breaking the knight who was blocking the door. “Alright! Listen up you lot," Julian called out. "I need you all to gather around and follow me. It’s time to show these people what we are made of,” one of the clones spoke up. “We don’t take orders from you or anybody else!” All the clones cheered and drank some more beer. The original clone came before Julian a bit embarrassed by what he had heard.
“What is the meaning of this?!” Julian grumbled.
“Well- there has been some problems with their behavior and-”
“What do you mean?!” Julian stammered.
“You see, when Rudolf clones he shares separate emotions in all of us. And because none of us has survived for more than just a few minutes outside combat. This is what happens,” He gestured to a couple of the noisy clones as an example. One of the clones close to Julian randomly burps.
"Well they listened to you! Make it clear to them and soon after you’ll gain control of Louis’s power,” Julian wandered out of the room dragging the unconscious Louis behind him.
“Come! After this is all over, we’ll have free ice cream!” shouted the clone. All the clones cheered and follow him.
Rudolf was sick and tired of this whole misunderstanding. He knew he would get fined and possibly kicked out of town for what he may or may not have done. Not to mention he would be missing out on all of Marti Wong’s CHING CHONG CHICKEN KABOB. If he escapes he would be fined another ¥500 and would be broke but this really rustled his jimmies. What the hell, he thought to himself. I have to find out what really happened. And so he ran forward and simply seeped past the metal bars like it was nothing.
Back at the hideout, Louis, Firen and Freeze were tied up along with some of the weaker villagers including Jan. Julian didn’t count on Firen and Freeze to team up and break bondage. No one had seen the devastating calamities that would soon follow. Their hideout was in ruin. Firzen had good intentions to stop Julian’s plan’s from rising to power. He let his tied up friends free and faced Julian’s devastating attacks ruthlessly.
The whole village had seen the explosion in the distance. Fire and ice had scattered across the area. Julian had never seen such power this mighty before. The clone was blown away too. He was uncertain if Julian would actually go along with the deal. However, gaining access to Firzen’s power meant he had some fighting chance if he were to go up against Julian and steal his power away from him. The possibilities of having such power corroded his mind!
Julian wasn’t aware of what the clone had in mind.
I would be able to buy enough ice cream for each of my clones for the rest of their lives! he sniggered as he thought this silly notion to himself. Julian ordered him to tell the rest of his clones to disguise themselves as the villagers until he was ready. Firzen fought Julian but it seemed it was not enough. Julian had appeared drunk and was able to hone the rest of his skills during combat. This made him unbelievably powerful, but because he was reckless he also made a few mistakes that nearly wiped his health down.
They were both tired. Julian was sober and Firzen was panting. Suddenly, Firzen was taken quite by surprise when something invisible had lifted him off the ground. The clone had waited for them to tire themselves out. He was able to transform and bask in the glory of such wondrous abilities. The clone walked up to Julian.
Julian leaned forward, “What are you doing?”
“Remember our bargain?" said the clone. Julian's eyes glowed. "I’m afraid you are at the end of your deal,” And with that, the clone held onto his clothes and turned into Julian at last. The mob was getting closer. It seems his clones weren't strong enough to withstand the entire village. "Pity, I thought my clones would have been strong enough to take you all on," he said to himself.
The last remaining clones endeared and fought awkwardly compared to their all mighty powerful brother. The clone had barely received any noticeable damage from the crowd of angry villagers. The little fighters did not rest either. He tore them apart knowing he had full control of the situation.
Then out of the corner of his eye he saw his master running toward him in the dense crowd. His master did not recognize him in the heat of the moment. These extra few seconds gave his opponents the upper hand. Woody came out of nowhere and bashed his knee right into his face, almost shattering the mask he was wearing. They quickly destroyed his body with what seemed like a never ending onslaught of physically painful hatred.
In a poof of smoke, the clone had transformed back into his normal state and almost immediately the crowd stopped in confusion. Rudolf continued to run and arrived to see one of his clones in sure agony. It was a bloody sight, it was a wonder in itself that he didn’t suddenly disappear before their eyes.
“Clone?” Rudolf knelt down beside his clone.
“Master, why did you need us?"
“What?”
“Why did you forsaken us?”
“I never left any of you guy’s behind.”
“Yes you did,” coughed the clone.
“You are my family. You left me on your own.”
“You let us live such a miserable, repetitive, inevitable death. How could you love us when you used us as a tool?”
“Nobody is strong just by themselves,” said Rudolf. “I needed you guys, you gave me strength. We all need each other in the end you know.”
“Yeah, well I’m the exception,” the clone mumbled faintly.
“Even if we've made some bad decisions you are still good in my heart.”
The clone thought to himself, Ha! Not really. I regret nothing!
"Well, ain't that touching?" said Deep. "Wait a minute, WOULD SOMEONE PLEASE BE SO KIND TO TELL ME, WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?!" Hushed by the crowd, Rudolf continued to talk one on one to himself.
“You left me with greed,” spoke the clone.
“That’s not true.”
“Yes, it is!” shouted the clone. “You don’t know what it’s like being a clone. I’m left with with an emotion. It is who I am. It embodies my whole personality.”
“But you’ve changed!”
“I was born evil and i’ll die-”, suddenly out of no where before he could finish his last words, a flying crate had been airborne ready to strike any poor sucker that would get in it's way of landing. Fortunately, it killed the over dramatized events that were ensuing because it's obvious target was the clone hanging onto dear life. Before anyone had realized the crate finally landed on the poor bastard, he was gone forever. They all lived happily ever after and ate at Marti's CHING CHONG CHANGITY CHONG LONG LING store for the duration of the story!
And there you have it folks-
Oh! What's that template?
Oh right, it seems I left out a very important piece of information. Seeing how Rudolf was blamed for his clone's angsty actions, he was still fined for the damages his clone(s) had made in addition to his prison escape. He was so broke he never went to eat at Marti's >insert stereotypicaly racists remark< restaurant. However, he did learn something that day.
"Stay up late even if it kills you, don't flee prison they'll only make you pay for it later, be a vagabond it's cool! And last but not least-" Rudolf stopped to slowly gaze up at the clouds in the sky. "-beware of flying crates."
And that concludes our tale of “Rudolf’s Clone”. Join us next week for another exciting episode of “Little Fighter’s!”
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(06-08-2013, 03:32 AM)LutiChris Wrote: I think I might have gone a little overboard with this but it was definitely worth it.
Have fun reading it.
Two clones protect their counterpart, Rudolf, from thieves and thugs all night long while he sleeps soundly. A silhouette lurks in the dark forest, causing mischief and trouble for mother nature to worry about. The clones are quick to notice the figure’s sly movement and welcome him with a handful of shurikens. The clones don't realize he is right behind them and casts an energy blast toward one of the clones. The clone dies and it's body fades into nothingness. The other clone recognizes the attack to be Justin's.
"Justin!" He called out.
"Shh- You wouldn't want to wake up your master," he whispered. The clone dismisses his comment and attempts to slaughter him with his katana.
Justin avoids the attack.
"Leave at once," the clone announced.
"Don't worry," He pulled out a red orb and ran away.
The red orb was one of Rudolf's items that he was carrying in a small bag to the next town over. He had orders from Rudolf that he shouldn’t leave his side but he couldn't simply let Justin steal that precious artifact. He had no time to tell Rudolf, he had to stop Justin. The clone followed him relentlessly. Justin was evasive in the face of danger but the clone was faster. The clone sprung onto Justin from behind and cut him down to the ground. Justin turned around but was unable to move because the sword was lodged around his neck.
"Alright, I'm sorry. I knew it was wrong of me to steal from-"
"Hand it over," demanded the clone.
Justin searched his pocket for the orb and tossed it in the air.
The clone loosened his grip to catch the orb but suddenly realized his mistake. Justin fired one more blast but the clone was quick to block the attack. Justin attempted to flee like a coward but the clone grabbed onto his collar and pulled him up by the neck. Justin tensed up ready for a beating when suddenly a wave of purple smoke took them both by surprise.
"Looks like dad's here," whispered Justin. "You're in a heap of trouble now."
From out of the smoke appeared none other than the infamous Julian.
"How many times have I told you not to go messing around with the hero's," he bellowed out loud.
"Father, I found the orb you asked me to find. He has it."
Julian radiated with steam. "Why you little!" But before he could take a swing at him the clone had transformed into Justin and threw him at Julian. Julian caught his son. The clone struck back but it was just an illusion. There he is again no- wait there ugh! It was really hard for him to tell. An echo of laughter mocked his attempts at getting it right.
I should be getting back to my master. This is way too dangerous for me to handle alone, he thought. No wait, that would only put him in even more danger. I need to get far away from Julian as possible, he transformed back to his normal state and ran. The voices and laughter pursued but he no longer saw them. Out of the bushes came a deafening roar. He was apprehended by a powerful light. The clone evaded Julian's attack. That soul punch would have taken him down without a doubt. Justin caught up to the scene. The clone had to get away so he cloned himself. Lucky enough, the clones did the same thing and a vicious cycle continued to produce fresh new clones which had the evil doers surrounded.
"Interesting," Julian remarked. All the clones attacked at once.
Julian put his hand on Justin and he was gone in a puff of smoke.
Soon after he did that he performed a devastating big bang on the majority of the clones. All but one stood overwhelmed by the sight of his raw power.
"You're unusual," Julian walked toward him in a slow manner, "Although you are a hero there is something about you that is not quite right." Julian knelt down. "You seek Power," the clone looked away. "Yeees, I can sense you are envious of my power. I can give you that power you seek," The clone was defiant.
"No! I'm just a clone. Kill me already!"
"What's this? You think you are no better than any of your friends?" the clone remained still, awaiting certain death. Julian got up and walked around him. "You have a great gift and you know how to use it wisely. Here's how it works," he whispered in his ear.
"I'll let you live if you do me a small favor. I'll go into detail later but the main thing to take away from this is I'll grant you the source of my power." The clone's eyes widened but then he remembered.
"I die in one hit," he muttered. "What's a clone like me got a chance with any of you?"
"This!" Julian presented a bottle of milk to the clone. "Drink this and you will gain equal health," the clone took the milk bottle.
"Join me in the search for power and together we will take down this pathetic kingdom!"
"What do I need to do?" asked the clone.
"Here's a list i've made of all the villagers in town" The clone scoured the list.
"B-but," he hesitated. "Rudolf's on the list."
"No No NO, you're not following my idea. Transform into each of the villagers including the little fighters and make an army for me," The clone looked down at the paper again, staring at his master's name for a brief moment. He smiled and transformed into Justin. "Why the hell not!" They had left the woods that night and morning soon followed. Rudolf had woken up from his slumber.
"Man, what a weird dream I just had," he checked his pocket for the red orb. It wasn't there. He looked up and noticed his two clones had disappeared. "Damn," he scratched his head. He got up and left the woods. He reached the entrance of the town and walked by some of the villagers. They seemed reluctant and avoided his very presence he stopped, puzzled by their bad mood. Then suddenly a voiced emerged from the crowd.
"Hey, YOU!" It was his best friend, Deep! Coming to greet him or so it seemed. Deep was very angry and by the looks of things all signs pointed to him.
"WHAT ON EARTH IS THE MATTER WITH YOU?!" he pushed Rudolf away.
"Wait-what? What the hell? I was out of town."
"Cut the crap ninja boy! Why did you attack me last night?"
"Did you not hear me? I was out of town it was probably somebody else!"
"My eyes do not deceive me." he squinted his eyes deep into Rudolf's soul.
"Well-" Rudolf was feeling mighty uncomfortable as well as perplexed.
"Not only did you attack me but you attacked the rest of the villagers!" Rudolf quickly turned to look closely at each of the villager passing by.
They were badly bruised up and had bandages covering parts of their body. Neither one of them wanted to make full eye contact with him. Davis walked by and saw the two of them.
"HEY YOU!" he shouted. Rudolf rolled his eyes.
"Yeah Yeah I know what this is all about. You're both under the impression that I had something to do with last night's attack. Well, I'm sorry but I swear you have the wrong guy," he was about to walk away when Davis stopped him.
"Oh yeah! Well- I found this in my room," he shoved a shuriken near Rudolf's face.
Indeed, he was astounded at the discovery. This has to be mine, but how? he wondered.
One of the villager's came up to Davis, he recognized that she was a friend of Jan's but he hadn't known what her name was all this time.
"DAVIS! I can't find Jan anywhere!" she squealed.
"What?!"
She jumped about pointing to Rudolf. "IT WAS HIM! IT WAS HIM! IT WAS HIM!"
"RUUUUDDOOOLLLFFF!" Davis was pissed.
In these types of situations he would likely run from the problem but he bumped right into Mark.
"Yo got some serious explain'n to do, punk!" The boy's took him down to Stanley's Prison, where he was to await his trial.
meanwhile...
"Hahaha, you've done a marvelous job. If I had gone in there it wouldn't have been a pretty sight. But you managed to quietly take down my enemies," said Julian.
"Well- I didn't kill them. I just did as you instructed me to do. There was also one individual I could not manage to transform into."
"I see," he looked unimpressed and a bit disappointed. "But you did a fine job anyways."
"This cloning business takes time, how many bottles do you have?" inquired the clone.
"Plenty, get to work!" he shouted. "Oh and just in case you have any funny ideas about taking me down like you did the other day," He waved his hands around a pile of armor and a knight had risen up from the clutter. He then raised both of his hands away from each other and lifted all the other remaining armor into a row of standing statues surrounding all four corners of the room. They also blocked all the existing exits between the large pillars.
"Have fun," and with that he slammed the door behind him with the last remaining scraps of armor filling in the spot in front of the door.
It was night time again. And up in the kingdom strange things were happening. Louis and Henry were doing cartwheels around their instructor, Monk.
"Sir, we don't have time for this tomfoolery. Stop this at once and practice your lesson!" Louis stopped but Henry went around in circles around them. "Would you please be so kind as to leave this room! You are distracting his royal majesty."
"Please Monk, address me as Louis. We don't need to be all fancy around here," said Louis.
"Pardon me your grace but like i've already mentioned the time of the great fiend is approaching. We need to be better prepared around here and I suggest-"
"-we go out to eat!" interrupted Henry. Monk pushed Henry out of the room using his shaolin palm. "That's nothing I can do it faster!" shouted Henry across the room.
"My stance allows me to block incoming attacks and it's done the proper way," Monk protested.
"IT LOOKS LAAAAMME!" shouted Henry.
"Pay no heed, he's a disgrace to the kingdom. Running around with those awful bandits and hunters everywhere," he shook his head.
"Enough of that i'll show you what I can do!" Louis exclaimed. The floor shook a powerful shock wave of force from both directions and pushed Monk to the other side of the room next to Henry. Monk faintly cheered, "Nice one!" and collapsed on the floor in exhaustion.
"Yep, I'm just that awesome!" Louis chuckled.
Suddenly, the floor shook violently and both Henry and Louis were startled. A massive soul bomb was heading their way but it was easily avoided. Julian was in plain view.
"So we meet again?" announced Julian.
"Ha! Dude?! How many times do I have to defeat you?" Louis laughed, "You're just thirsty for more aren'tcha?"
"How dare you insult me! I came back because i'm certain this time you will LOSE!"
"Yeah well don't count on it, he's gotten better as time went by," said Henry.
"Fools! Don't expect i'll be that careless again," said Julian.
"Bring it on Buttercup!" Louis said.
"Yeah! We're ready for ya!" shouted Henry.
"THEN LET THE GAMES...BEGIN!" Julian immediately created a bunch of flying skulls. Both Henry and Louis run blindly toward certain doom. Monk finally wakes up after his short nap.
"I do say sir- AHHHH!!" Monk screamed and is hit multiple times in the face by the skulls. He is passed out once again. Henry fired a critical shot in Julian's direction. Julian stops and is on the move. Louis does his mighty thunder punch but ends up passing right through a mirror image of Julian. He is attacked violently by more skulls in the other direction but is quickly stopped by two of Henry's Dragon Palm attacks. Louis heads right over to Julian but quickly runs away from him because of his mighty explosion. That gives Henry enough time to pull out his flute and do a little tune. Julian is raped in mid-air by the music restraining his every movement as well.
"YOU ARE SO ANNOYING" shouted Julian.
Julian ran after Henry who is taunting him and saying "You can't catch me!" Louis begins to follow Julian but he is too late to save his friend. Julian caught up to Henry and punched him right out of the room. Louis began to fire a round of kicks at Julian but was hit by his uppercut. Things were turning out pretty bad. Even though Julian was severely damaged both Louis and Henry were so weak. Louis thought it would be a good time to get rid of the armor.
"OH no you don't!" Julian took the red orb from his pocket and threw it as hard as he could at Louis. Louis was hit hard in the chest while he was transforming. The red orb was possessing him. He tried to fight it but with no avail, he went and fell asleep. Julian picked him up and carried him over his shoulder. Henry returned with some beer.
"Oh no! What have I done?" Henry panicked. Monk coughed and Henry was delighted that he was alive.
"Where's Louis?" he inquired.
"Julian defeated him," said Henry.
"Oh dear! We should warn everybody, Julian is going crazy! Oh my!"
"What is it Master Monk?"
"Are you-"
"Yes?" asked Henry.
"Are you drunk?! You smell dreadful!"
meanwhile...
Rudolf passed back and forth inside his cell wondering how he was framed for last night's disturbance. He surely couldn't have sleepwalked. Maybe a bunch of bandits dressed up in bathrobes attacked everyone! But no that wouldn't work. They are too clumsy and stupid to pull something like that, he thought to himself.
"Guards! Guards!" Jack called out. He was breathless. "Julian has invaded the Castle-"
"Again?" one of the Knights complained.
"Yes, but this time he has taken Louis hostage!"
"But sir, what about the prisoner?"
"We need everyone's help."
"Let me out! I want to help. Please, I was probably drunk. I'm sorry for what I did." pleaded Rudolf.
"You're not sorry enough besides I've never seen you drunk before and that was unforgivable! Look what you did to my hair!" And with that they left to search for Louis.
Back at the Forbidden Tower...
Being bad ain't so bad it's kind of fun actually. Many of the Clones had been turned into a lot of the villagers, a few had stayed the same, while the rest were goofing off. The real Jan was tied up having to watch them make fools of themselves. Two of the clones thought it would be funny if they impersonated people she knew.
“Why are you doing this to me? Ew, that’s disgusting!” she turned away from the two clones who were making out.
“Guy’s, come on! Cut that out,” said the clone. “You know how that makes me feel.”
“Ever since you opened our eyes to freedom and sin there is nothing more thrilling than to not take orders and just do whatever the hell we want,” the ninety-seventh clone stopped to drink some beer. “We are eternally grateful for that,” said the eighteenth clone.
“Yes, but for the time being try to restrain yourself from sexual practice.” both clones detached from one another and wrestled the group behind them making fun of Monk and Mark.
Julian forced his way in thus breaking the knight who was blocking the door. “Alright! Listen up you lot," Julian called out. "I need you all to gather around and follow me, it’s time to show these people what we are made of.” one of the clones spoke up, “We don’t take orders from you or anybody!” All the clones cheered and drank some more beer. The original clone came before Julian a bit embarrassed.
“What is the meaning of this?!” Julian grumbled.
“Well- there has been some problems with their behavior and-”
“What do you mean?!” Julian stammered.
“You see, when Rudolf clones he shares separate emotions in all of us. And because none of us has survived for more than just a few minutes outside combat, this is what happens.” He gestured his own kind. One of the clones close to Julian randomly burps. "Well they listened to you! Make it clear to them and soon after you’ll gain control of Louis’s power,” Julian wandered out of the room dragging the unconscious Louis behind him.
“Come! After this is all over, we’ll have free ice cream!” shouted the clone. All the clones cheered and follow him.
Rudolf was sick and tired of this whole misunderstanding. He knew he would get fined and possibly kicked out of town for what he may or may not have done. Not to mention he would be missing out on all of Marti Wong’s CHING CHONG CHICKEN KABOB. If he escapes he would be fined another ¥500 and would be broke but this really rustled his jimmies. What the hell, he thought to himself. I have to find out what really happened. And so he ran forward and simply seeped past the metal bars like it was nothing.
Back at the hideout, Louis, Firen and Freeze were tied up along with some of the weaker villagers including Jan. Julian didn’t count on Firen and Freeze to team up and break bondage. No one had seen the devastating calamities that would soon follow. Their hideout was in ruin. Firzen had good intentions to stop Julian’s plan’s from rising to power. He let his tied up friends free and faced Julian’s devastating attacks ruthlessly.
The whole village had seen the explosion in the distance. Fire and ice had scattered across the area. Julian had never seen such power this mighty before. The clone was blown away too. He was uncertain if Julian would actually go along with the deal. However, gaining access to Firzen’s power meant he had some fighting chance if he were to go up against Julian and steal his power away from him. The possibilities of having such power corroded his mind!
Julian wasn’t aware of what the clone had in mind.
I would be able to buy enough ice cream for each of my clones for the rest of their lives! he sniggered as he thought this silly notion to himself. Julian ordered him to tell the rest of his clones to disguise themselves as the villagers until he was ready. Firzen fought Julian but it seems it was not enough. Julian had appeared drunk and was able to hone the rest of his skills during combat. This made him unbelievably power, but because he was reckless he also made a few mistakes that nearly wiped loads of his health down.
They were both tired. Julian was sober and Firzen was panting. Suddenly, Firzen was taken quite by surprise when something invisible had lifted him off the ground. The clone had waited for them to tire themselves out. He was able to transform and bask in the glory of such wondrous abilities. The clone walked up to Julian.
Julian leaned forward, “What are you doing?”
“Remember our bargain?" said the clone. Julian's eyes glowed. "I’m afraid you are at the end of your deal.” And with that, the clone held onto his clothes and turned into Julian at last. The mob was getting closer. It seems his clones weren't strong enough to withstand the entire village. "Pity I thought they would have been strong enough to take you all on," he said to himself.
The last remaining clones endeared and fought awkwardly compared to their all mighty powerful brother. They clone had barely received any noticeable damage from the crowd of angry villagers. The little fighters did not rest either. He tore them apart knowing he had full control of the situation.
Then out of the corner of his eye he saw his master running toward him in the dense crowd. His master did not recognize him in the heat of the moment. These extra few seconds gave his opponents the upper hand. Woody came out of nowhere and bashed his knee right into his face, almost shattering the mask he was wearing. They quickly destroyed his body with what seemed like a never ending onslaught of physically painful hatred.
In a poof of smoke, the clone had transformed back into his normal state and almost immediately the crowd stopped in confusion. Rudolf continued to run and arrived to see one of his clones in sure agony. It was a bloody sight, it was a wonder in itself that he didn’t suddenly disappear before their eyes.
“Clone?” Rudolf knelt down beside his clone.
“Master, why did you need us?"
“What?”
“Why did you forsaken us?”
“I never left any of you guy’s behind.”
“Yes you did,” coughed the clone.
“You are my family. You left me on your own.”
“You let us live such a miserable, repetitive, inevitable death. How could you love us when you used us as a tool?”
“Nobody is strong just by themselves,” said Rudolf. “I needed you guys, we all need each other in the end.”
“Yeah, well I’m the exception,” the clone mumbled faintly.
“Even if we've made some bad decisions you are still good in my heart.”
The clone thought to himself, Ha! Not really. I regret nothing!
"Well, ain't that touching?" said Deep. "Wait a minute, WOULD SOMEONE PLEASE BE SO KIND TO TELL ME, WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?!" Hushed by the crowd, Rudolf continued to talk one on one to himself.
“You left me with greed,” spoke the clone.
“That’s not true.”
“Yes, it is!” shouted the clone. “You don’t know what it’s like being a clone. I’m left with with an emotion. It is who I am. It embodies my whole personality.”
“But you’ve changed!”
“I was born evil and i’ll die-”
“RETARDEDLY!” coughed Henry. The crowd turned and gave him a disapproving look. Rudolf turned back to his dead clone but he vanished without a trace.
And that concludes our tale of “Rudolf’s Clone”. Join us next week for another exciting episode of “Little Fighter’s!”
That has GOT to be the single-most longest post you have ever written,Mr. Laziness :P
Great story though.
I am getting my story ready too.Hopefully will post it tomorrow.
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So I just realized how many errors I need to fix and cool things I left out in the story. I'll update that post later on this week. It's too early in the morning for me to change my stuff. Stay tuned for version 2 next week.
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im gonna participate
@leo
yea i will try to make a template story
is it allowed to make a poem? (maybe some rhythm and some symbols, figurative parallelism and some other figures of speech which can be used only in poems)
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Don't forget Haikus!
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(06-08-2013, 08:16 PM)empirefantasy Wrote: is it allowed to make a poem? (maybe some rhythm and some symbols, figurative parallelism and some other figures of speech which can be used only in poems) (06-08-2013, 08:53 PM)LutiChris Wrote: Don't forget Haikus!
(06-05-2013, 08:49 PM)Reaper Wrote:
'tis going to be a really really weird Haiku.... or a long poem. If you can pull it off in a decent fashion, I'm going to tip my imaginary hat.
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