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[Zabobula]

I wasn't here for 2 days and you guys already screwed up wit the story(with Drahcir and Mailliw)... You are making fun when I made mistake in grammar, but what should I say now?
Anyway that's not what I wanted to say now(you can repair it anyway so it's ok). I wanted to say that I will not be here online for 2 days again, but I will write something while I am away(I just hope that you won't gone to far with story again, cus then I will have to think up something again, but it's ok). I hope that I will be able to get the internet in one of this 2 days when I'm gone so I can post my part of story.
Don't worry guys we won't stay behind with our part of journey in story. I will take care of it(or at least I hope I will)...

Dude, this isn't just about you. What "we" are trying to do is get this story as far away from this all-to-similar LOTR plot as much as possible. Yeah sure, I'll admit to mistaking Drahcir with Maiiliw in the scenes and I can change that. And generally, I believe that everyone gets the picture of what's going on. (Depending on how it's written...and if they can understand it)

Think about that next time you write your part.

[Evil Sonidow]

I wasn't here for 2 days and you guys already screwed up wit the story(with Drahcir and Mailliw)... You are making fun when I made mistake in grammar, but what should I say now?
Anyway that's not what I wanted to say now(you can repair it anyway so it's ok). I wanted to say that I will not be here online for 2 days again, but I will write something while I am away(I just hope that you won't gone to far with story again, cus then I will have to think up something again, but it's ok). I hope that I will be able to get the internet in one of this 2 days when I'm gone so I can post my part of story.
Don't worry guys we won't stay behind with our part of journey in story. I will take care of it(or at least I hope I will)...

Like you haven't driven the story to what YOU want before, and we went with it. Don't complain when you did the same thing.

[Reaper]

Now I am completely confused who tries to say what, but I don't think that he was complaining about that we went on with the story. I mean, we haven't gone on with his part of the story anyway. Maybe he means that he has to write often if he wants to go on as fast as we do. I could be wrong of course, but I also might be right and then you shouldn't act that harsh.
I don't know whether you are referring to the part on the top or to the part in the middle of his post, but if its the top i want to say: As I know from own experience there isn't always much time to think about what exactly you are writing and sometimes the choice of words might be stronger than it should. "Screwed up" could be one of this cases.( Anubis had corrected me before when i screwed up with Mailliw and Drahcir by the way.) See? Now I used "screw up" myself and it doesn't sound that strong, does it? And by the way:

Anyway that's not what I wanted to say now(you can repair it anyway so it's ok)

And if its about the part in the middle:

I just hope that you won't gone to far with story again, cus then I will have to think up something again, but it's ok

It might be that I understood something completely wrong and you were talking about something completely different, but anyway.
And about that thing with the grammatical mistakes: This was intended to bring more people into writing here, of course including those who make mistakes in grammar.( Anubis was writing before anyway but thats not the point.) I'm sure that both of you didn't intend to be mean in any way and its very nice of you to correct grammatical mistakes so everyone can read the texts fluently, but in forums, without directly speaking to each other, there can easily be missunderstandings because you don't know how the other one wants to say something.

Now I've written a long text although i didn't want to blame anyone at all... Seems as if I failed but I post it anyway. I hope nobody feels blaimed now.
Now all of us, including me, calm down and forget this
(If I was consistent I would have say that all of you might be calm anyway and also have chosen the wrong words )

[Lord Anu]

Huh finally I get the internet here, but for short time so I won't talk much... Sonidow and Zab I saw what you wrote... I didn't say nothing against you, but let's put that aside.
Then I started to read and I said:''Damn Drahcir wrote this part before me...''
Ok, I will do as Drahcir wrote and continue on his story, but look at mine part of story. You will see that I put some work into this and that I am not sleeping the whole day on vocation:

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The blue dark passed... The morning came. Rain started to fall again to wake up all creatures in these lands. Drahcir came out of his tent. Everything was so grey. The trees were shaking with strong wind and easy rain. Suddenly Drahcir saw somebody in a distance. He couldn't see his face because of rain.
''Who's there!!?'' Drahcir yelled.
The person quickly turned himself in way where Drahcir's voice came from. The person was ready for battle.
''Gosh you scared me...'' Sharky came out of the dark.
''Sorry... I didn't reconize you.'' Drahcir said.
''What's going on?'' Anubis woke up and came out of his tent.
''Nothing important... We should go. We made to big pause. Demons are everywhere over the world.'' Drachir said.
''I don't know where are demons and I don't really care... I agree with you Drahcir. Come on Sharky. Go and wake up the others.'' Anubis said so Sharky go and did it.
''Do you think that this young men could help us?'' Drahcir asked Anubis.
''Alec and Harold?''
''Yes...''
''Well, somehow I think that they have great potentional for combat. I think they could be great warriors, but still they are to small.'' Anubis was talking.
''I know what you think. They are to young to be of a great help... Right?'' Drahcir asked again.
''I didn't say that they cannot help much. They could be of a great help if we can put them on right position.'' Anubis answered, but Drahcir seemed to be not happy with answer.
''Right position?''
''You will understand when time comes.'' Anubis answered again.
''Hey you 2! Time to go! We have to reach the city Cikuro today before after noon!'' Prince Noir pulled them 2 and so they all moved on.
Weather was bad through whole the way to Cikuro. Everywhere wild trees, water on the ground together with mud.
''We will be there soon?'' Alec asked nervous while they were traveling.
''Keep walk... This is just a mud and wet trees.'' Sharky answered.
''Yeah, but it's annoying.'' Alec said then.
''When you're going in a battle or you're going home from a battle you never choose the path.'' Anubis put himself in conversation.
''And the paths are always like this?'' Alec was interested.
''No... They are not always like this. Sometimes, the sun can shine, and the path is clear... and on the sky... you can see a clear blue sky, with few white clouds, and the rainbow after the great rain...'' Anubis was describing the moments when he left his village and his brother Mayon.
''Wow. That isn't bad, right?'' Harold was impressed.
''No. Not bad at all. It looks beautiful.'' Anubis said and looked in the grey sky through the thick trees.
''I never saw nice weather when battle ends.'' Harold said then.
''You were in battle?'' Drahcir asked.
''My snall village was destroyed in big raid by demons. They were burning and slaying all in their path. I survived.'' Harold answered sadly.
''I'm sorry because of your loss. We have so many things to share Harold.Our hometown was destroyed too when we was young.'' Anubis pointed on Tiny and Sharky.
''I am going to cry by your sad stories and it seems that we are finally here...'' Sharky said and started to laugh.
Others started to laugh too after that. Very soon they arrived at city Cikuro. King of city Cikuro take prince Noir in his chamber to talk with him. Other 6 heroes were free to do what they want. Tiny and Sharky gone to the palace, to see their wifes. Drahcir, Alec and Harold stay with Anubis. They went to tavern to drink something and relax.
''Welcome my lords, what you will drink?'' The bartender came to them.
''I will pay everything, and give me some warm coffe.'' Anubis said and smiled.
After that others ordered the drink too. Drahcir was drinking beer, Alec some juice and Harold beer too. They all started to laugh a little when they saw what Anubis ordered.
''What?'' Anubis asked.
''Warm coffe? Here in tavern?'' Harold explained easy.
''Yes... I like easy and warm drinks. It calm down my mind and then I don't think to much on troubles.''
''HAHAHA!!!'' Alec couldn't hold himself and he laughed out loud.
''Even if you have troubles, haha... You can slove it by talking and doing deeds, not by drinking drinks for children.'' Drahcir said and looked on Alec.
''Hey!'' Alec yelled on Drahcir.
''The persons must calm down sometimes to think about problems. Not like going to have fun by dancing or drinking alochol to forget about their problems. When you drink drinks like this you can contetrate on your problems and solve it in your head and with yourself. Then go to talk and do deeds. First you must solve the problems with yourself.'' Anubis was trying to explain and they stopped to laugh that loud.
''And our problem are demons and evil Warlords. How could we rid of them?'' Alec said loud and the peoples looked at 4 heroes.
''Quiet! The peoples didn't used to talk about wars and demons or evil Warlords!'' Drahcir warned him quietly.
''Ok guys. While I was living here before I go to city Quarzt, I heard a rumors that on the Ancient Lake is one thing of a great power. Maybe a sword, orb or some kind of necklace. I don't know exacly, but I also heard that demons are trying to get there. However they cannot get there until they don't destroy this city Cikuro, because Cikuro is right on thair way to get to Ancient Lake. Or they will go on long way, all around the city Cikuro. I think they will choose this first option. To destroy the city Cikuro and then go and get that thing on Ancient Lake. It won't be easy to stop them. Here they will strike the hardest. We must be ready to push them back.'' Anubis was talking and others were quiet, but then Drahcir break the silent.
''How we are going to destroy demons once for all? You didn't planned that?'' Drahcir said.
''We must gather the rest of heroes... Sonidow, Philus, Cen and your brother Mailliw. I'm sure that there is more heroes like us. We will need to discuss with them how we will destroy them. You cannot just walk into the forbidden land of demons and come to Castle Firend.''
''And what about that wraith... Daymio?'' Drahcir asked serious.
''Who is Daymio?'' Harold asked then.
''He's an evil lord. He's leading a great army of demons. I was friend with him for short time, long ago. He had really bad childhood, so he grew up in dark and evil person. I'm sure he will attack here together with king Nostro.'' Anubis answered.
''King Nostro will attack here!?'' Alec said loud again.
Drahcir just give him an angry look so he began quiet again.
''How we are going to resist them here? We don't have that great army here in Cikuro. And if king Nostro will come with his army we have no chance...'' Harold was talking.
''I'm sure prince Noir and our king will think up something. Later I will go and help them with strategy. Now you 3 go and get some rest here. I must talk with my wife a little. I'm sure that they have some nice rooms in tavern. Here take this.'' Anubis said and put the bag full of gold coins on table.
Then Anubis stood up and started to move, but Harold stoped him.
''Will you be ready to help soon with strategy to prince Noir and king?'' Harold asked.
''Don't trouble your mind like me... You will see that it's usless. And you won't dispare anymore. I will dispare for all of you, cus I know what chances we have to win. Now go and get some rest, you will need it.'' Anubis said and left them alone.
The night was approaching slowly. Way to palace wasn't easy now... A lot of peoples and guards were on the street. They were all running somewhere in different ways. Anubis was pushing peoples to get to palace. When he finally arrived he quickly run to his room.
''Kira! Kira?'' Anubis was calling her, but he heard nothing.
Only the wind near the open windows.
''Kira where are you!? Kira!'' Anubis was screaming and then he suddenly meet Kira near the door that leads to their bedroom.
''O my God! You scared me!'' Kira said.
''I just get scared from such a silent here... You're ok?'' Anubis asked.
''Yes. You defeated the demons at city Quarzt?''
''No... We failed. The city has fallen and it's destroyed now. You missed me so much. I wish... I wish that after every battle I could hug you.'' Anubis answered sadly.
Kira give him a kiss... A short time passed while they were kissing on the door and somebody was knocing on the main door right now.
''Let me see what they want now... I will come back quickly.''
''Ok.'' Kira said and left Anubis to go.
''What do you want now!!??'' Anubis started to scream on Tiny and Sharky when he get out of his room.
''Demons arrived. They are here.'' Tiny said serious.
Anubis looked at them with so much surprised face. Sharky smiled to him to remove his surprised face. Then Anubis grab the door. He wanted to enter to his room, but then Tiny stopped him.
''Let me go to my wife!'' Anubis yelled.
''Brother... We don't have time. Come on now.'' Tiny answered on his anger.
Anubis looked at the ground and then he left the door. Anubis started to run with his brothers to the big gate at the city Cikuro's entrance. There they meet Drahcir, Harold, Alec, prince Noir and king.
''Do we have any strategy!?'' Haroled yelled so everyone cam hear him.
''We will fight the best as we can! If the chance for great deamge comes we will use it against enemy!'' Drahcir answered.
''So guys... Let's go and send them back to hell where they belong!'' Prince Noir said and pulled his shiny sword out.

No matter if you don't want to put this, I will try to think something on Drahcir's part of story tomorrow(I just hope that my inspiration won't disappear).

[Zabobula]

I'm too lazy to read all that...*gets over it.

''I am going to cry by your sad stories and it seems that we are finally here...'' Sharky said and started to laugh." - Rofl

"My snall village" - even more rofl

''So guys... Let's go and send them back to hell where they belong!'' Prince Noir said and pulled his shiny sword out." - XD

Anyway, hey Anubis it's best if you don't write ahead. Because someone may write something and just screw up any and/or all plans that you may have had. Just go with the flow man. Makes things alot more interesting what people can come up with at the last minute. That's how I roll.

[Elias]

Zabobula is saying the truth because this not you story it's our story and try not to go really far stop when all good ideas are out and let some one else put the ideas okay Anubis.

[Ascor]

And stop the hell to write like i was a stupid dumb CHILD!
Qoute:''We will be there soon?''
C'mon! That's a sentence 5 year old kids ask theire parents if they are travelling to holydays.
(That may sound childish but) I'm nearly 14 and i'm more a men than a child.
Damn in the story i already killed persons.
(Flashback first part off me. At this time i was going to kill someone. And i did before.)

[Evil Sonidow]

(That may sound childish but) I'm nearly 14 and i'm more a men than a child.

It does, and also being 14 you're not more a man but you're not a child. Welcome to the transition phase.

Done with offtopic, let's forget what Anubis said for now and focus on other discussing.

Makes things alot more interesting what people can come up with at the last minute. That's how I roll.

I disagree, since last minute stuff tends to suck (in general, homework/story/work/whatever). Too much planning though doesn't help either when you think more than you write.

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*SELF-SMITE*

[Zabobula]

Ok, I'm sorry, I'm generally pissed off now.

To Anubis (this is regarding your current post): If you can take the time to write these long entries, you can also take the time to correct them. I'm not sure if your english is not that good or not but seriously man. I'm pretty sure that you are writing your stories in the quick reply box instead of doing it the right way and writing it all to Microsoft Word so it can be spell checked. And even if you spell check it, it's good to read over your story so that you can correct any mistakes that spell check wont get.

I was literally panting for air after I corrected one of your earlier posts and because of that I'm done being the spellchecker.

I suggest a grammar rule for this forum novel: NO MORE THAN 4-6 GRAMMAR ERRORS IN EACH POST. ANY POST WITH MORE THAN 6 ERRORS WILL HAVE THEIR POST DELETED.

Harsh? If you guys are actually serious about this story you'd say yes to my suggestion and not have to go through the trouble of reading low-quality posts.

EDIT: The suggestion for the grammar rule goes for EVERYONE. Even me.

[Lord Anu]

Ok, I'm sorry, I'm generally pissed off now.

To Anubis...

Always me... No matter, I already used to. Well, you don't have to be pissed off Zab because I won't making troubles anymore with english grammar. Even if I write something at the end of this story I will be careful.
Sorry, but I can't write in Word. I got some viruses on my computer so I can't open Microsoft Word for very long time... I must fix my computer a little, but I never have a time.
Btw I fixed mistakes...